Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the different venues of dance classes and the bar graph represents the present number of youngsters participating in these dance classes in a town in Australia.

Overall, most of the dance classes held in private studios while in the college-based studios the dance classes held slightly. Mostly, the children aged under 11 years participated in the ballet classes and small number of pupils were interested in modern dance classes of this age bracket.

In a town in Australia, 48% of dance classes were held in the private studios. While community halls accounted at 18%. After school, 24% of school halls were accounted for helding dance classes. However, school based studios used for dance classes were 10%.

There were about 600 numbers of puplis aged under 11 years who participated in ballet dance classes. However, pupils of the same age group who joined the tap and modern dance classes were about 450 and 300 in numbers respectively. The pupils aged in 11 and 16 years who participated in the ballet, tap and modern dance classes were approximately 300, 420 and 510 in numbers respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and report the main figures accurately: private studios are identified as the largest venue share at 48%, and the age-group figures for ballet, tap and modern are mostly correct. Your overview also notes the strong participation in under-11 ballet. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not identify the contrasting pattern among 11–16-year-olds, whose highest figure is modern, or compare the age groups overall. The claim that only a “small number” of under-11s chose modern is not well supported when set against the other figures. Also, “college-based studios” are described as being used only slightly, but the chart gives their share as 10%; state this more precisely. A fuller overview of the key contrasts would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for venue data and class participation. This makes the information easy to locate, and linking words such as “Overall,” “However,” and “respectively” help connect points. Some cohesion is mechanical or unclear, though. The repeated use of “However” does not always signal a genuine contrast, and the sentence beginning “After school, 24% of school halls…” is difficult to follow because the relationship between the percentage and venue is obscured. The overview also moves from venue information to one age-group observation without setting out the main comparison between age groups. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each figure directly to its category.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “illustrates,” “accounted for,” “participated,” and “approximately,” and the meaning is generally understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “the dance classes held slightly,” “accounted at 18%,” and “helding dance classes.” There are also spelling errors in “puplis,” and “numbers of pupils” is an awkward way to describe the figures. Repetition of “pupils” and “dance classes” limits flexibility. Aim for concise, standard chart language—for example, say that classes “were held at” a venue and that a number of students “attended” a style. Check spelling and use “share” or “proportion” when describing percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “pupils of the same age group who joined…” and a contrast introduced by “while.” Most of the data remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “most of the dance classes held” needs a passive verb (“were held”), while “the dance classes held slightly” lacks a clear verb construction. The sentence “While community halls accounted at 18%” is an incomplete subordinate clause, and “the pupils aged in 11 and 16 years” uses an incorrect age construction. Articles and prepositions also need attention. Practise complete comparisons such as “Community halls accounted for 18%” and “students aged 11–16,” while varying sentence structures accurately.

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