Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The piechart and graph chart illustrates the data on the location and different types of dance classes for young people who currently attending classes in austalia town.

It is evident that, the highest 48% perecntage of youngers take dance classes from private studios while the lowest data collect by collage-based studios with only 10%. Moreover, the ratio of 24% is shown by school halls and the community hall & other percentage is 18% only.

Now time to evaluate the number of students currently taking dance classes as per age group. Firstly, in ballet 11 year old student accounted for 60% and age of 11-16 years only 30% student taking dance classes. In tap the students of under age 11 years the perecntage is nearby 45% while the age group of 11-16 year student number is more than 40%. In the modern dance , age of 11 year old student number is 30% while in the age of 11-16 the student ratio is almost 50%.

Overall, in piechart the private studios working hardwork to give classes with highest percentage and ballet dance ratio of under 11 is higher than other and modern dance ratio is highest in age group of 11-16 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify several important features: private studios are the most common location (48%), college-based studios the least common (10%), and the leading dance styles differ by age group. Your overview also correctly notes that ballet is strongest among under-11s and modern among 11–16-year-olds. However, the bar-chart figures are repeatedly described as percentages, although the chart gives numbers of students; for example, ballet is about 600 and 300 students, not 60% and 30%. The tap comparison is also imprecise, and the overview could state more clearly that older students favour modern and tap while younger students favour ballet. The main features are relevant, but some are not fully or accurately reported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on class locations, a paragraph comparing dance types, and a concluding overview. Sequencing phrases such as “Moreover” and “Firstly” help signal movement between points, and the reader can generally follow the comparisons. However, the final overview repeats information rather than bringing the main contrasts together, and “Now time to evaluate” is an awkward transition that interrupts the report-like flow. Some comparisons are packed into long sentences, making the relationships between age groups less clear. Use a concise overview after the introduction, then group the bar-chart comparisons by age group or dance style, with linking language that clarifies each contrast.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “ballet,” “tap,” and “modern dance,” so the topic is clear. However, the range and control are limited, with repeated use of “ratio,” “percentage,” “student number,” and “dance classes.” Several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “highest percentage of youngers,” “the lowest data collect,” and “working hardwork to give classes.” Spelling errors, including “austalia,” “perecntage,” and “collage-based,” also reduce precision. Aim for standard chart-reporting language and accurate nouns: describe figures as the “number of students” rather than percentages, and use verbs such as “attended,” “accounted for,” or “stood at” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including comparisons between the two age groups, but grammatical control is inconsistent. The opening has a subject–verb agreement error (“The piechart and graph chart illustrates”) and an incomplete relative construction (“young people who currently attending”). Other examples include “11 year old student accounted for 60%,” where the plural and article are not controlled, and “the age group of 11-16 year student number is more than 40%,” which has an unclear grammatical structure. Articles, plurals, and verb forms are also inconsistent across the response. These errors sometimes make comparisons harder to interpret. Practise building accurate comparison sentences, for example, “Under-11s numbered about 600 in ballet, compared with 300 students aged 11–16.”

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.