Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph chart illustrates the locations and types of dance classes young in a town in Australia are currently attending.

overall locations of dance classes private studios hold the highest number of people while the lowest the lowest number of people visiting college-based studios. Under the age of 11 are the highest in 2 age group while 11-16 remain slow

Peivate studios significally the highest with 48%,School halls(after school) 24% are currently practicing dance while community halls and other 18% and college based studio 10%.

Ballet dance is favourate of age under 11 approximately 600,while tap 450 and lowest 300 in moderns dance.However age between 11-16 age group prefer modern dance above 500, little lowest in tap 430 and ballet on 300.

meanwhile age under 11 remain the highest in all categories and uepr age remain lowest with all

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and report several key figures accurately: private studios are highest at 48%, college-based studios lowest at 10%, and the age-group figures for ballet and modern are broadly correct. However, the overview is unclear and includes a major contradiction: you first say under-11s are highest, then claim they are highest in all categories, although 11–16-year-olds lead in modern and slightly in tap. The statement that the older group is “lowest with all” is also inaccurate. The response is 131 words, below the required 150; the eight words copied from the prompt are excluded. Develop a clear overview and compare the age groups accurately to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: you begin with an introduction, give an overview, and then report location and dance-type details. Basic linking words such as “while,” “however” and “meanwhile” show attempts to connect comparisons. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is unclear and the final sentence repeats an inaccurate comparison rather than concluding the report. The location figures and age-group data are placed close together without clear paragraphing, and some links do not express the intended contrast reliably. For example, “However age between 11-16 age group prefer modern dance” needs a clearer connection to the preceding under-11 figures. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and chart details, and organise comparisons consistently.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “private studios,” “community halls,” “age group,” and “approximately,” so the reader can identify the main categories and figures. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the meaning harder to understand. “The graph chart” is redundant, “favourate” is misspelled, and “remain slow” does not clearly describe a lower figure. Phrases such as “highest number of people visiting” are also imprecise for chart data. Aim for concise reporting language and accurate collocations, such as “accounted for,” “was preferred by,” and “the figure for.” Check spelling and avoid repeating “highest” and “lowest” without specifying the category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and comparisons, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors are frequent enough to affect clarity. For example, “overall locations of dance classes private studios hold the highest number of people” lacks clear sentence structure and punctuation. In “Ballet dance is favourate of age under 11 approximately 600,” the relationship between the subject and the figure is not grammatically expressed. There are also problems with articles, plurals and agreement, as in “age between 11-16 age group.” Sentence boundaries and commas are often missing, creating run-on or fragmented statements. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use comparative structures such as “The figure for ballet was higher among under-11s.”

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