Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustrate give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, it is lucid that the location of dance classes private studios was a major data shared whereas, college based studios was a minor data contributed while, by age group of under (young age) ballet was a highest data shared.

Fetching into details, there were diffrent types of keyelements of location of dance classes private studios was a highest data contributed at 48 percent.Nextly, school halls (after-school) was a second highest data shared with the 24 percent.Next community halls & others was a second least data involve with the 18 percentage remarkably.College-based studios was a minor data shared at the 10 percent.

Considering remaining details the types of classes(by age group) the age of under11 ballet was a highest data shared 600 students while,11-16 ballets was a least data shared with the 300 students respectively. Tap was a second highest data sherd with the 450 students. the age of 11-16 second highes data shared 400.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios account for the largest share (48%), while college-based studios are the smallest (10%). You also include some age-group figures, such as under-11 ballet at 600 and older students’ ballet at 300. However, coverage of the second chart is incomplete and partly unclear: the response does not report the modern figures, and the final comparison gives “400” for 11–16 tap, although the chart shows approximately 420. The overview also focuses on under-11 ballet without summarising the broader contrast that younger children favour ballet while older students favour modern. Select the key comparisons across both charts and report them accurately to make the summary more complete and clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate sections for the location and age-group information. This gives the reader some sense of how the charts are being discussed. However, progression within the paragraphs is weakened by repetitive and sometimes confusing linking, including “Nextly,” “Next,” and “Considering remaining details.” Several comparisons are difficult to follow because ideas are compressed together, particularly the final sentences about tap. Use clearer topic sentences and group related figures into direct comparisons—for example, compare the two age groups for each dance type. More accurate referencing and fewer repeated transition words would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “percentage,” and “students,” so the reader can identify the subject and several chart categories. However, the range is limited and the repeated phrase “data shared” is not a natural way to describe chart figures. Expressions such as “a minor data contributed” and “a second least data involve” are also unclear, while spelling errors such as “diffrent,” “keyelements,” and “sherd” reduce accuracy. Aim for precise reporting language and vary it appropriately: figures “account for” a share, a category “has the lowest proportion,” and student numbers “stand at” a particular level. Check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentence forms, including the overview beginning “Overall” and the clause “while, college based studios was a minor data contributed.” However, these attempts are often faulty, and many sentences lack reliable control of basic structure. For example, “The charts illustrate give information” combines two verb forms, while “private studios was a highest data contributed” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops and commas separating clauses awkwardly. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then add comparisons using controlled clauses such as “whereas” or “while.” This will make the information easier to understand.

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