Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

These charts illustrates that, the location and types of dance classes in a town in australia which young people are currently attending.

As an overview, there are different types of dance classes with age group under eleven and eleven to sixteen. As there are three types of dnace classes.

To Begin with, as private studios havefourty eight percent of dance classes, college based studios have ten percent, School Halls (after school) twenty four percent and community halls and other have 18 percent dance classes.

Moreover, in Ballet dance classes has six hundered pupils of the age group under eleven and eleven to sixteen age group contains three hundered people. Furthermore, in tap dance classes they have four hundered fifty youngsters in under eleven age group and around four hundered twenty students of eleven to sixteen age group. In Modern dance classes there are three hundered students of under eleven age, from eleven to sixteen age group mostly around five hundered twenty.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report the main location percentages and give figures for all three dance styles across both age groups, so the response includes relevant information from both charts. However, the overview is not sufficiently informative: saying there are “different types” and “three types” does not identify the key patterns. For example, the largest location is private studios, while the age-group preferences differ: under-11s are highest in ballet, whereas 11–16-year-olds are highest in modern. These comparisons would make the main features clear. Most figures are accurately represented, although the response mainly lists data rather than selecting and comparing the most significant features. Develop a concise overview and explicitly compare the leading and lowest figures to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, an attempted overview, location figures, and then figures for each dance style. Linking expressions such as “To Begin with” and “Moreover” help signal movement between points. However, the overview repeats that there are three dance types without guiding the reader to the main comparisons, and the body reads largely as a list. The transition from location percentages to age-group data could be clearer, for example by separating these into distinct paragraphs and grouping the age figures by the most notable contrasts. Some linking is mechanical, and the sentence beginning “As there are three types…” is incomplete, interrupting progression. Organise the information into a clear overview and two focused body sections, using references that make each comparison easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “private studios,” “community halls,” “Ballet,” “Tap,” and “Modern,” and the reader can generally identify the categories and figures. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, which makes the report less precise. “Pupils,” “people,” and “youngsters” are used interchangeably for the same chart measure; “students” would be more consistent. There are also noticeable spelling errors such as “dnace,” “hundered,” and “fourty,” alongside awkward phrases such as “have … percent of dance classes.” Use accurate chart-reporting language such as “accounted for” or “recorded,” and check spelling carefully. More precise comparative vocabulary would also help you describe the leading and lower figures rather than simply listing them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer structures, including “in tap dance classes…” and “from eleven to sixteen age group…,” but control is inconsistent and most sentences follow a simple listing pattern. Errors occur frequently enough to make parts awkward or difficult to process. For example, “These charts illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “As there are three types…” is a fragment. The opening also has an unnecessary comma after “that,” and phrases such as “in Ballet dance classes has…” lack a clear grammatical subject. Improve sentence control by using complete clauses, checking singular and plural agreement, and placing articles and prepositions carefully. For instance, write “The charts illustrate…” and “Among under-11s, ballet had the highest attendance.”

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