Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustrate data about the percentages of young individuals who attending the dance lectures in a town of Australia recently. Overall, the charts gives the information about types of dance lectures by age groups. However,the numbers of students in Ballet, Tap,and Modern.

Therefore, the first chart demonstrates the percentages of dance classes. However, the private studios contains large part accounted for 48 percent, While Community halls and other have 18 percent of dance classes. Furthermore, School halls contain 24 percent of dance lectures after school and College-based studios teaches around 10 percent dance classes.

Moreover, the second chart illustrate that in Ballet the pupils who are under 11 they are accounted for above 600 numbers of students. Although, The numbers of students in Tap and Modern around 450 and 300 regularly who are Under 11. Additionally, the students who are belong to 11 to 16 age group are maximum in numbers in Modern accounted for above 500, while in Tap it is above 400 numbers of students. However, in Ballet the numbers of students are around 300.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and report the main location proportions accurately: private studios are largest at 48%, followed by school halls at 24%, community halls and other venues at 18%, and college-based studios at 10%. You also compare the age groups across ballet, tap and modern, with the approximate figures generally matching the chart. However, the overview is unclear: “Overall” is followed by a description of what the charts show rather than a summary of the key patterns. A stronger overview would highlight that private studios are the most common venue and that preferences differ by age, with under-11s favouring ballet and 11–16-year-olds favouring modern. Some comparisons are reported, but the main trends are not clearly synthesised.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: it introduces the charts, discusses locations, then moves to dance types. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and several linking words do not express the relationship between ideas accurately. For example, “However” begins sentences that simply add information, while “Although” introduces a statement without completing a contrast. The opening overview is also fragmented, particularly “However,the numbers of students in Ballet, Tap,and Modern.” Use a clear overview paragraph, then organise each chart’s details in a logical sequence. Choose connectors for their precise function, and avoid repeating “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “However” when a direct comparison or simple sentence would be clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to identify the chart categories, including “private studios,” “School halls,” “Ballet,” “Tap,” and “Modern,” and you attempt a range of reporting expressions such as “accounted for” and “illustrate.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, which makes some descriptions awkward. “Dance lectures” is not an appropriate term for classes, and “large part” is imprecise for a percentage. Phrases such as “maximum in numbers” and “above 400 numbers of students” are also unnatural. Aim for standard chart language such as “accounted for,” “the highest number,” and “approximately 420 students.” More precise, natural phrasing would improve clarity while retaining the relevant vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons introduced with “while” and “although.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to process. Examples include “young individuals who attending,” where the verb form is incomplete, and “the charts gives,” where subject–verb agreement is incorrect. The sentence beginning “However,the numbers of students…” is a fragment, while “the pupils who are under 11 they are accounted for” uses an unclear, duplicated subject structure. There are also problems with articles, plurals and punctuation, such as inconsistent capitalisation after commas. Practise building complete sentences with one clear subject and verb, then check agreement and punctuation before adding subordinate clauses.

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