Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given graph shows the location and types of dance class attend by youngstres in a town in australia.i will describe my vew point in upcoming paragraphs.
From the first part graphs shows us the dance classes attend by people is 48% by private studioswhich is largest percentage in graph as compare to college based students its around 10% which is the smallest percentage of people in given graph.
on the other hand community halls and others people attend dance classes is around 18 percentage which is the third largest percentage in this graph and school halss after schools who attend the dance classes there percentage in given chart is around 10% which is lowest second highest percentage of students in graph.So in this graph shows us the percentage of students in a city of australia who attend the dance classes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response identifies the topic and reports some figures from the location chart, including private studios at 48%, college-based studios at 10%, and community halls at 18%. However, it does not describe the second chart at all, so the comparisons between dance styles and age groups are missing. It also misreports school halls as 10%; the chart shows 24%, making this the second-largest location. The overview is limited and does not accurately summarise the main features across both charts. The response is also 9 words below the 150-word minimum. To improve, cover both charts, select the most notable comparisons, and check each figure against the visual before writing.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction and two body paragraphs, and phrases such as “on the other hand” signal a shift between points. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the second paragraph repeats the location-chart summary rather than moving to the chart about dance types. Some linking language is also used inaccurately: “on the other hand” does not introduce a clear contrast here, and the final sentence repeats the general topic instead of concluding the report. Use one paragraph for the location data and another for age-group comparisons, with a concise overview near the beginning. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise referencing would make the organisation easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “private studios,” “community halls,” “percentage,” and “largest,” so the reader can recognise the subject and some comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings reduce clarity, such as “view point,” “youngstres,” and “college based students” where the chart refers to college-based studios. Repeated use of “graph,” “percentage,” and “dance classes” also makes the description sound repetitive. Aim to use accurate chart terminology and a wider set of comparison phrases, such as “accounted for,” “followed by,” and “the smallest share.” Proofread spelling and use the chart’s labels consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts some longer sentence forms, but control is inconsistent and many sentences contain errors that make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “From the first part graphs shows us” has faulty subject–verb structure, while “people attend dance classes is around 18 percentage” does not form a clear grammatical sentence. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “the dance classes attend by people.” Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and the longer attempts are not reliably controlled. Build accurate short sentences first, then combine related information using structures such as “while” or “whereas.” Check agreement, verb forms, and punctuation when editing.
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