Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart illustrates the information on the location and type of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The pie chart shows the informaion of location of dance classes where as the bar chart shows the types of dance classes like ballet, tap and modern and categorize them by age group.

The highest porpotion of dance classes are held in private studios. Afterwards, the second highest porpotion with percentage of 24% are the school halls, where these classes are conducted after school. Then 18% of classes are held in community halls and other. The least amount of classes are held at college based studios.

The bar chart is divided into three types of dance classes. The highest amount of children whose are under 11, participants in ballet dance class. Whereas, the children whose age are ranging from 11 to 16 years, their number in ballet dance class are half of this amount. We can see only a 100 students difference in both age groups in tap dance class. Furthermore, in modern dance class, the age group of 11 to 16 years dominate with the lead of 200 students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and report several key comparisons accurately: private studios are the largest location category, college-based studios the smallest, and the age groups differ in ballet and modern. The figures of 24% for school halls and 18% for community halls are also correct. However, the overview is not clearly stated, and some important details are incomplete: the 10% figure for college-based studios is omitted, and the bar-chart discussion gives only the 100-student tap difference rather than the approximate values. The claim that the under-11 ballet group is the highest is accurate, but the overall pattern across all three dance styles could be summarised more clearly. Add a concise overview and include selected figures to make the comparisons more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response is arranged in a generally sensible order: an introduction, discussion of the pie chart, and then discussion of the bar chart. This makes the two visual elements easy to distinguish. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, particularly with “Afterwards,” “Then,” and “Furthermore,” and the overview is not separated clearly from the detailed reporting. Some references are also awkward or unclear, such as “this amount” and “their number,” which make the reader work out the comparison. Organise the response around a brief overview followed by focused details, and use direct comparisons such as “Ballet participation falls from about 600 to 300” to strengthen the flow and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “percentage,” “age group,” “participants,” and “dominate,” so the main information remains understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive: “highest proportion of dance classes are held” confuses the proportion of classes with the location share, while “lead of 200 students” is not a natural expression. There are also spelling errors such as “informaion” and “porpotion,” and repeated use of “amount” where “number” or “figure” is more suitable for students. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling; this will make your descriptions clearer and more natural without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including a contrast with “Whereas” and a comparison introduced by “Furthermore.” The main message is usually clear, but some sentence structures are incomplete or awkward. For example, “Whereas, the children whose age are ranging from 11 to 16 years, their number…” is not a complete, well-formed contrast, and “children whose are under 11, participants…” lacks a clear grammatical connection. There are also agreement and article problems in phrases such as “the highest amount of children” and “the number … are half.” Use complete clauses with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement—for example, “The number of ballet students aged 11–16 is half that of the younger group.”

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