Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts below shows the information about types of dances classes attending by one of the Australian town's young people on different locations.

overall, it is clear that, almost half Part of total Students Choose Private Studio for dance

and mostly people Under 11 like to do Ballet dance. modern dance dominated by people above 11.

To begin with dance institutions location, Private studios dominated as a major location for this activity because one twice Part of the students prefer to learning dance through private academy.On the other side, college based studios contibuted only 10% of total attention which is lowest rather than other places. Around 24% of yougsters doing dance Practise in their school hall after Schooling hours. Community halls and other cantres teaching dance to 18% of total young students in a town.

The second graph illustrate that, most of the people Who are under 11 interested in Ballet. But age groups between 11 to 16 prefer to learn modern dancing. currently around 600 Students going to Ballet dunce Classes. but over 11 years teenager are less interested in this segment.Less than 300 youngster attending ballet dance lecture. There is not big difference in Tap. Because the numbers of Students who are under and above 11 is almost same around 400 to 420.But modern dance show the changes.Nearly 520 Students learn this dance who all coming from 11 to 16 age group and under 11 years students attendance is almost half of the above 11.This figure is totally opposite of ballet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and provide a clear overview: private studios are the most common location, while ballet is most popular among under-11s and modern among 11–16-year-olds. Most figures are accurately reported, including the 48%, 24%, 18% and 10% location shares, and the approximate comparisons for ballet and modern. This meets the task well, with some features developed more fully than others. However, the overview says “mostly people Under 11 like to do Ballet,” which is imprecise: ballet is the leading choice for that age group, but the chart does not show that most under-11 students take ballet. The tap comparison is useful, though the claim that the figures are “almost same” could be made more precise by noting the small difference between about 450 and 420.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two charts. This makes the main information easy to locate, and phrases such as “To begin with” and “The second graph” help signal the shift between topics. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes uneven, and several linking expressions feel mechanical or unclear, such as “On the other side” and “But modern dance show the changes.” Some references also require the reader to infer the meaning, particularly “this segment” and “This figure is totally opposite of ballet.” Grouping each age group’s figures more systematically, then comparing the categories, would create smoother cohesion and clearer links between claims.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, including “private studios,” “college based studios,” “after Schooling hours,” and “age group,” so the subject is generally clear. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “dominated” and “contributed.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “one twice Part” does not express the intended proportion, “total attention” is unsuitable for a share of students, and “ballet dunce Classes” contains a spelling error. Several phrases, including “dance lecture” and “people … prefer to learn modern dancing,” are less natural for describing class attendance. More precise terms such as “accounted for,” “attended,” and “participation” would improve clarity and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons between age groups, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, errors in sentence structure and grammatical control are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward or unclear. For example, “The charts below shows” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Private studios dominated as a major location … because one twice Part of the students prefer” is not a complete, well-formed construction. There are also inconsistent verb forms and missing or incorrect articles, as in “The second graph illustrate” and “under 11 years students attendance.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly after full stops. Check agreement, sentence boundaries, and article use when editing.

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