Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart illustrates the number of students attending different types of dance classes. Students are split into two categories under 11 and 11-16. Approximately 600 students are attending Ballet, Tap and Modern dance classes.

On the one hand, we can clearly identify that in Ballet approximately there are 600 students who are under 11. Meanwhile, there are only 300 student who are between 11 to 16, which are half of under 11 students. However, if we compare Tap dance classes with Ballot, so there are 450 students who are under 11 and there are approximately 420 students who are between from 11-16. last but not the least, In modern dance classes bar of students from 11-16 gets rapid increase, as there are 520 students. There are very few number of students who are under 11. Under 11 students bar is gradually declining from [redacted phone]. However, students who are between 11-16 their bar is rapidly rising from [redacted phone].

On the other hand, Pie chart illustrates different types of loctions where these students have their dance classes. From 100%, 48% students are attending their dance classes in Private Studios. 24% students are preferring School Halls for dance calsses. 18% students are little bit confuse and they are attending dance classes in Community halls and other. Very Minimal students 10%, They are making their dance practices in College-Based Studios.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and report the main figures accurately: private studios are the most common location at 48%, while college-based studios are least common at 10%; you also compare the age groups across ballet, tap and modern. The trend summary—that participation among under-11s declines across the three styles while the older group rises—is a useful overview and is supported by the data. This breadth, together with mostly accurate reporting, is a strength. However, there is no clear opening overview of the most important features, and some comparisons are less fully developed. For example, the location figures are listed but not contrasted as a whole, and “very few” under-11 modern students is vague despite the figure being about 300. A sharper overview and more precise comparisons would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a generally understandable order: it discusses the bar chart first and the pie chart second, and the age-group comparisons are mostly easy to follow. Paragraphing also separates the two visual elements. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear. The repeated transitions “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” suggest a contrast that is not really being made, while “However” is used several times without always introducing a clear opposing point. The sentence beginning “last but not the least” also interrupts the progression, and the final trend summary repeats information already given. Organise the response around a concise overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use linking expressions only when they show a genuine relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “approximately,” “students,” “attending,” and “increase,” so the reader can generally understand the information being reported. There is also some attempt to vary expression, such as “preferring” and “rapidly rising.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or informal for an academic report. “Students are a little bit confuse” does not describe the chart data appropriately, and “very Minimal students” is an awkward way to report a small proportion. There are also spelling errors such as “Ballot,” “loctions,” and “calsses,” alongside repetition of “students” and “bar.” Use precise reporting language and check spelling; for example, describe proportions as “account for” or “represent” a share rather than attributing preferences or confusion to the students.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer comparative sentences, and the main meaning is usually recoverable. For instance, the comparison that 300 older ballet students are “half of” the under-11 figure communicates the intended relationship. However, some errors in agreement, articles, sentence construction and punctuation remain. Examples include “there are only 300 student,” where the plural is needed, and “there are 450 students who are under 11 and there are approximately 420 students who are between from 11-16,” which has an incorrect preposition pattern and is cumbersome. Capitalisation after full stops is also inconsistent, as in “last but not the least.” Aim for cleaner sentence boundaries and accurate comparative structures, such as “There were 450 under-11 tap students, compared with about 420 in the older group.”

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