Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given piechart and bar diagram illustrate the information on the location and types of dance classes of young people in a town in australia.

overall, The piechart is give information of location of dance classes however the bar diagram represent the types of dances classes by age group.

in the location of classes the highest percent have is the private studios . it has only 10%.like thet the school halls after the school has higher change then community halls and other because it has 24%.

At the types of dance classes by age group ballet has the highest under 11.tap also has large number of under 11 and modern dance has less sssssssssstudent under 11. the student of age 48% are more interested in modern dance more than ballet and tap

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies both chart topics and makes a few relevant comparisons, including that ballet is most popular among children under 11 and modern dance attracts more students aged 11–16 than ballet or tap. However, coverage is minimal and several figures are misread: private studios account for 48%, not 10%, and the 10% figure belongs to college-based studios. The claim that “the student of age 48%” prefers modern dance confuses a percentage with an age group; the chart shows approximately 520 students aged 11–16 in modern classes. The overview does not report the main patterns across both charts. The response is also 27 words below the 150-word minimum, with nine prompt words excluded from the count. Add accurate key figures and a clear overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening names the two charts, and separate paragraphs discuss location and dance types. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, progression is limited, and the second paragraph mainly repeats what each chart represents rather than summarising its key message. Within the body, comparisons are difficult to follow, particularly in “the school halls after the school has higher change then community halls and other.” The transition to the age-group chart is abrupt, and linking words such as “however,” “like that,” and “because” do not clearly express the relationships between the data. Use a concise overview, then group related comparisons in a logical order with accurate linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “location,” “private studios,” “school halls,” “age group,” and the dance styles. This shows a basic ability to describe the subject, but the range is limited and several choices make the data unclear. “Highest percent have” is not a natural way to describe a chart share, while “higher change” does not convey a meaningful comparison. “The student of age 48%” also uses the wrong expression for an age group and percentage. There are noticeable spelling and form errors, including “piechart,” “australia,” “thet,” and “dances classes.” Aim for precise terms such as “accounted for,” “proportion,” and “number of students,” and check spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple statements and a contrast, for example, “the piechart … however the bar diagram represent,” but control is inconsistent and the range of sentence structures is very limited. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur in “the piechart is give information” and “the bar diagram represent.” Articles, sentence boundaries, and punctuation are also unreliable: “overall, The” incorrectly capitalises the next word, and several sentences run together after full stops, as in “10%.like.” These problems sometimes make the intended comparisons hard to interpret, especially in the final sentence. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related information with controlled clauses, checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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