Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the location of dance classes young people of a specific town in Australia are currently attending, while the bar chart is representing the information about the types of dance classes.

Young people are highly attending dance classes in private studios and less attending on the college-based studios. People aged between 11-16 years is mostly learning Modern dance, in contrast, the highest proportion of people under 11 is joining Ballet dance classes.

In the pie chart, the highest proportion is reserved by the private studios with a percentage of 48. The lowest proportion is representing the college-based studios which is 10%. The dance classes which helds on school halls are holding 24% of this pie chart. Community halls and other places for dance classes are representing 18% proportion in the pie chart.

The group of 11-16, more than 500 students are participating modern dance classes while more over 400 are joining Tap dance classes. Near about 300 are involved with ballet dance. On the other hand, people under 11, 600 students are joining the ballet dance and near about 450 joining at Tap dance classes. About 300 students are participating modern dance classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main contrasts: private studios are the most common location, college-based studios the least common, and the preferred dance styles differ by age group. The figures you report are broadly consistent with the chart, including the location percentages and approximate student totals. This gives the response a clear overview and relevant supporting detail. To make the summary more complete and precise, compare the age groups directly—for example, ballet participation is higher among under-11s, whereas modern is higher among 11–16-year-olds, while tap numbers are relatively similar. Some descriptions, such as “highly attending,” are also unclear, so the overview does not always express the data accurately. More selective, explicit comparisons would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a brief overview, and separate paragraphs describing the location and age-group data. This makes the two charts easy to follow, and transitions such as “In contrast” and “On the other hand” help signal comparisons. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, with repeated openings such as “In the pie chart” and repeated references to “the pie chart.” The final paragraph lists figures in sequence but could connect them more clearly through direct comparisons between age groups. Some references, including “this pie chart,” are repetitive rather than informative. Use a wider range of linking and comparative structures, and organise related figures together, to create smoother progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing charts, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “participating,” and “in contrast.” These choices allow the reader to understand the main information, and you attempt some more formal reporting language. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “highly attending,” “less attending,” “reserved by,” and “holding 24%” do not express the data naturally. “The highest proportion is representing” is also an awkward way to describe a chart value. Prefer precise reporting phrases such as “accounted for,” “made up,” and “had the highest participation.” Avoid repeating “joining” and “participating” when a more varied but accurate vocabulary is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast structure with “while” and a comparison introduced by “On the other hand.” Most of the information remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “People aged between 11-16 years is” has subject–verb disagreement, and “the highest proportion of people under 11 is joining” uses an awkward tense and structure. In “The group of 11-16, more than 500 students are participating,” the opening phrase does not form a clear grammatical subject. Check agreement, sentence construction, and articles, and use consistent present-simple forms for chart descriptions. More accurate control of these patterns would make your comparisons clearer.

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