Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The illustration gives us information about the young people who are currently attending dance classes in different types and their location in a town in Australia. Overall, most popular location of dance classes which is attended by people is private studios 48%. In addition, age group of students under 11 go to ballet classes around 600 students and lowest ration is seen in modern classes with 300 students.

In pie chart, college based studios was used just 10% for dance classes and community halls and others are used 18%. Furthermore, school halls after school in used 24% and private studios was used on largest ratio for dance classes 48%.

In bar graph, under 11 age group students were more attractive towards ballet dance 600 students and tap classes were joined by around 450 students, modern classes were attended by just 300 students. Moreover, age group from 11 to 16 modern classes were joined by approximately 510 students and tap classes by 410 students and ballet classes by 300 students. Trend was changed by the increasing age.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify several key figures accurately: private studios account for 48%, college-based studios 10%, and the under-11 group has its highest participation in ballet (600) and lowest in modern (300). You also compare the age groups, noting that modern is more popular among 11–16-year-olds while ballet is more popular among younger students. This gives the response a clear overview and relevant supporting detail. However, the overview focuses mainly on the location chart and the under-11 group; it would be stronger if it summarised the contrasting age-group pattern across all three dance styles. The final claim that the trend changes with age is relevant but could be made more precise by stating which styles rise or fall.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an opening overview is followed by a paragraph on locations and one on the age-group figures. This makes the two charts easy to distinguish, and linking expressions such as “In addition” and “Moreover” help connect information. However, the progression is sometimes mechanical, and some details are repeated: the 48% figure for private studios appears in both the overview and the next paragraph without adding a new comparison. The reference in “Trend was changed by the increasing age” is also vague, so the reader must infer which trend you mean. Grouping the age comparisons by style, or explicitly contrasting the two age groups, would create a clearer progression and more effective cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough task-related vocabulary to report the charts, including “age group,” “private studios,” “bar graph,” and “approximately.” The main figures and categories remain understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are noticeably unnatural or imprecise, such as “lowest ration,” “more attractive towards ballet dance,” and “classes were joined by” students. “Used” is also repeated for the locations, limiting the range of reporting language. Choose verbs that describe participation and proportions more naturally, such as “attended,” “accounted for,” or “represented.” Greater precision in phrases such as “the lowest proportion” and “most popular style” would make the comparisons clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, including comparisons introduced by “Furthermore” and “Moreover,” and the reader can generally follow the information. However, errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “Overall, most popular location … is private studios” is missing an article and has a number mismatch, while “school halls after school in used 24%” has an incorrect verb construction. The phrase “age group from 11 to 16 modern classes were joined” also lacks a clear grammatical link between the group and the classes. Practise complete subject–verb structures and accurate articles, agreement, and verb forms; these would make your comparisons much easier to read.

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