Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the given chart show about how many people are interested to learn dancence from different placeses in Austriala. this chart show different resho of people.

Fristly, There are 48% people like to private studios for learning dance and it is highest percent of people who like to more private studios.morever,only 10% people like to college basesd studios. it is the lowest percent of people whoes like to there.

Howover, 24% schools gives the dance classes to people after schools in austriala and 18 percentpeople are interested in other communities and other placesed.

overall, Many people thought private stidios are good for learning dance and this chart shows the hightest and lowest interested placeses percent. Highest percent people like to private studioes and 18% people like to visit other placeses for leanring dance classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify several accurate figures: private studios are the most common location at 48%, college-based studios the least common at 10%, and school halls account for 24%. However, the response covers only the location pie chart and omits the second chart entirely, which compares dance styles for the two age groups. The overview is also repetitive and partly inaccurate: it first identifies community halls and other locations as 18%, but later calls this the “lowest” figure, despite college-based studios being lower. The task is only minimally addressed because a major part of the visual information is missing, and the response is 17 words below the required minimum. To improve, summarise both charts and make a clear, accurate overview of their main contrasts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, two paragraphs about location figures, and a concluding overview. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “However,” and “Overall” help signal movement between points. However, the progression is limited because the same location information is repeated in the conclusion, while the second chart is not incorporated. Some links are also unclear or mechanically used; for example, “However” does not introduce a contrast with the preceding point about the lowest percentage. The overview repeats the claim about private studios rather than bringing the key information together. Organise the response around both charts, group related comparisons, and use linking expressions only when their logical relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percent,” “private studios,” “college-based studios,” and “dance classes,” so the general topic is usually recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several word-choice, spelling, and word-form errors make the writing less clear, such as “dancence,” “Austriala,” “resho,” and “placeses.” Phrases such as “people like to private studios” and “the highest percent of people who like to more private studios” are not natural ways to describe chart proportions. Use precise reporting language, for example, “accounted for,” “was the most popular location,” and “the smallest share.” Check spelling and avoid repeating “people like” when describing percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences are simple, and you attempt some longer structures, including “There are 48% people like to private studios for learning dance and it is highest percent…”. However, sentence patterns are often inaccurate, and errors with articles, agreement, and clause construction make several statements difficult to follow. For example, “the given chart show” needs subject–verb agreement, while “24% schools gives the dance classes” has an unclear grammatical relationship between the percentage and the subject. Capitalisation after commas is also inconsistent, as in “Fristly, There are…”. Practise clear comparison structures such as “Private studios account for 48%, making them the most common location,” and check each sentence for a complete, correctly formed subject and verb.

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