Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given pie chart illustrates the location of dance classes of young people and bar charts demonstarates the types of dance classes by their age group in a city in australia.

Overall, it is clear that private studios has dominated all others dance classes and ballet dance has highest number of students of age under 11 and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the two chart types and makes a relevant overall observation that private studios are the most common location. It also notes that ballet has the highest participation among children under 11, which matches the data. However, the report is incomplete: it stops mid-sentence after “and”, gives no comparison of the older age group, and omits the other location shares and dance figures. The overview is therefore only partial, and the charts are not summarised sufficiently to show their main patterns. The response also falls well short of the required 150 words. To improve, complete the overview and report the key contrasts, such as modern being most popular among 11–16-year-olds while ballet leads among under-11s.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening sentence introduces both charts, followed by an overview beginning with “Overall”. This gives the reader a simple starting structure. However, the response ends abruptly with “and”, so the final idea is unfinished and there is no clear progression into supporting details. No figures or comparisons are developed in separate, logically ordered points, and the overview itself combines unrelated observations without completing them. Use a complete overview paragraph, then organise the details by chart or by age group, with clear links such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile”. This would make the information easier to follow rather than leaving the reader with an incomplete outline.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “pie chart”, “bar charts”, “location”, “types” and “age group”, so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is very limited because the response contains almost no language for describing proportions, quantities or comparisons. Several choices are inaccurate or awkward, including “has dominated all others dance classes”, which confuses locations with dance classes, and “in a city in australia”, which does not accurately reflect the task’s description of a town. There are also spelling errors such as “demonstarates”. Build a more precise chart vocabulary, for example “accounted for”, “participation”, “proportion” and “was more popular than”, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a compound sentence to introduce the charts and a separate overview sentence, showing some basic sentence control. However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. In “the pie chart illustrates … and bar charts demonstarates”, the plural subject “bar charts” requires a plural verb, and the article is missing before “bar charts”. The phrase “private studios has dominated” also has subject–verb disagreement, while “all others dance classes” has an incorrect grammatical construction. The final sentence is unfinished, ending with “and”, which leaves the structure incomplete. Aim first for complete, accurate sentences with correct articles and agreement; then add a few controlled comparison structures, such as “whereas” or “while”, to express the chart contrasts.

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