Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the three different locations of dance classes in a town in Australia while, the bar chart shows the types of dance classes attended by different age groups.

To begin with, the pie chart represents 48% people attend private studios. 24% are practicing in school halls after school. The locations gained the least people are community halls ans college based studios compromising of 18% and 10% respectively. The location which attracted the largest proportion is private studios while, college based studios gained the least proportionality.

Looking at the bar graph, there are three types of dance classes. 600 children under the age of 11 are practising ballet while, only 300 adults aged 11-16 are taking part in similar type of lesson. Moreover, tap seems to attract both groups in almost same numbers, 410 students are present from young group and almost 450 participants are present from adult group.At last more adults seem to enjoy modern type of dance class, almost 520 in total and 300 students from the young category are present in this class.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main features of both charts, including private studios as the most common location and college-based studios as the least common, and you compare participation across the three dance styles. However, some figures are misreported: the chart shows about 450 under-11s in tap and 420 participants aged 11–16, whereas you give these values the other way round. The age groups are also children under 11 and people aged 11–16, not “adults.” Your overview is mostly embedded in the details rather than clearly summarising the main contrasts. To strengthen the response, add a concise overview of the key patterns and check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: it introduces both charts, discusses locations in one paragraph, and then turns to dance types. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “Looking at the bar graph,” and “Moreover” help guide the reader. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward, particularly “At last,” and repeated use of “while” makes comparisons less smooth. The second paragraph also moves through the data without a strong summary of the overall age-group pattern. Use more direct comparison structures and organise the bar-chart details around the main contrasts—for example, ballet being more popular among under-11s, while modern is more popular among the older group.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “participants,” “attend,” and “attracted,” and the meaning is generally understandable. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing this data: “locations gained the least people,” “least proportionality,” and “adults” for the 11–16 age group. There are also spelling and form errors, such as “ans” and “compromising,” which should be “and” and “comprising.” Repetition of “students” and “present” limits the range. Aim for precise, natural collocations such as “accounted for,” “participated in,” and “the older age group,” while checking spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can follow the main comparisons. Some sentence structures are nevertheless faulty or awkward. For example, “The pie chart represents 48% people attend private studios” combines two clause patterns incorrectly; write “The pie chart shows that 48% attend classes in private studios.” In “The locations gained the least people are…,” the clauses are not joined grammatically. Commas are also misplaced before “while,” and there is no space after the full stop in “group.At last.” These issues recur, although they do not prevent understanding. Practise accurate that-clauses and comparison sentences, and proofread punctuation and sentence boundaries.

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