Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart compares the information about the location of dance classes, and the bar chart illustrate the type of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
It is evident that the highest percentage of dace classes held in private studios, while ballet dance is most popular on among the under 11 children.
according to the pie chart , the highest proportion of dance classes are locate in private studios at 48% .The figure for community halls and other is 18% .However, in Australia, 24% location of dance classes held in school halls and college based studios are only 10% , which is much lower than other categories.
In terms of bar chart, ballet dance classes are the most popular among the children under 11 with around 600 participants, while the figure for modern dance classes same popularity among the younger children around 500.For tab dance both age groups are similar .Around 450 young children and 420 older children do tap
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the two chart topics and report several relevant figures, including private studios at 48%, school halls at 24%, and the similar tap participation figures for the two age groups. The overview also correctly notes the leading location and the popularity of ballet among younger children. However, important comparisons are missing or inaccurate: modern is not similarly popular among under-11s at around 500; it is about 300, while the 11–16 group is about 520. You also omit the older group’s leading preference for modern and the younger group’s lower modern figure. The response therefore covers the charts only partially, and some selected details are unclear or misreported. Compare both age groups across all three dance styles more precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a brief overview, and separate discussion of the location and dance-type charts. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within the body is uneven, particularly in the final paragraph, where the modern comparison is inaccurate and the discussion then moves to tap without a clear organising pattern. Linking words such as “However” and “In terms of” are used, but some connections do not express the relationship clearly. For example, the sentence beginning “However, in Australia” combines several location figures awkwardly. Group the bar-chart data by age group or by dance type, and use clear comparisons to connect each figure.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “highest proportion,” “participants,” and “popular,” and the reader can generally understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors reduce precision. Examples include “dace classes,” “tab dance,” “the figure for community halls and other,” and “same popularity.” “Location” is also used where you mean the proportion of classes held at a venue. These errors sometimes make the data description difficult to interpret, especially in the bar-chart paragraph. Build a more accurate set of terms for describing shares and participation, and check spelling and natural combinations before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts a few longer structures, such as “while ballet dance is most popular…” and “with around 600 participants,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors include subject–verb agreement in “the bar chart illustrate,” missing verbs in “the highest percentage … held,” and “the figure for modern dance classes same popularity.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “the pie chart ,” and several sentences begin with a lowercase letter. These problems sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. Practise complete clauses with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation. More accurate sentence patterns would make the chart information easier to follow.
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