Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the pie chart illuestrates the location of dance classes while while the bar chart demonstrate the types of dance classes among town in Australia are currently attending .

Ovarall,it is clear that Private studios had higest location of dance classes white accountable of dance classes additionaly school halls and community halls and other contribute significantly collage basd studios had the lowest figure

in the term of bar chat it is clear that 11 to 16 age group significantly increase from ballat to modern esspashioly has modern is the higest number of student accounting for 500 pluse

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify both visuals and give a broad overview, noting that private studios have the largest share and college-based studios the smallest. You also report that modern is the most popular class among 11–16-year-olds. However, the response only partially covers the data: it omits the location percentages and most comparisons between age groups and dance styles. The statement that the 11–16 group increases from ballet to modern is inaccurate, since tap is about 420 students and modern about 520, while ballet is about 300; the trend does not rise steadily from ballet through tap. The response is also 54 words below the required minimum, which leaves the key features underdeveloped. Include accurate figures and compare both age groups across all three styles.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces the pie and bar charts, and the next sentences offer an overview and a comment on the age-group data. This gives the reader some sense of the intended progression. However, the response is very compressed, with no clear paragraphing or developed sequence of comparisons. Linking is limited, and phrases such as “in the term of bar chat” do not clearly signal how the second chart relates to the overview. Repetition in “while while” also interrupts flow. Separate the introduction, overview and detailed comparisons into paragraphs, and use clear links such as “By contrast” or “Among under-11s” to guide the reader through the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “pie chart,” “bar chart,” “age group,” “accounting for” and “figure,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to interpret, including “illuestrates,” “Ovarall,” “ballat” and “collage basd.” Some phrases are also unnatural for describing data, such as “had higest location” and “contribute significantly.” Use precise terms such as “accounted for the largest proportion” and “recorded the lowest figure.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating general words like “number” when “student total” or “proportion” is more exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to form connected sentences and uses a few structures to compare information, but the grammatical range is limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “the bar chart demonstrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “among town in Australia are currently attending” is an incomplete and confusing clause. The overview sentence beginning “it is clear that Private studios…” also lacks a clear grammatical relationship between the studios and the share they represent. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including the lower-case opening and missing spaces after commas. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add comparisons using controlled clauses, for example: “Private studios account for 48% of classes, the largest share.”

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