Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart and bar chart illustrates informaion on the exact location and types of dance classes young people in a town in australia are currently attending dancxe classes. The bar chart shows the some locations of dance classes in australia, first of all the most huge dance classes in the private studios that which are 48%. On the other hand college based studios give the 10%. While the school halls after school attended 24% dance classes. At the end community halls and other give the result of classes 18%. Perhaps, the bar chart shows the numbers of student in the dance classes by age group. Initially in the ballet the number of students under the age 11 which are 600 and age 11 to 16 number of

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify both chart topics and report the four location shares accurately: private studios are highest at 48%, while college-based studios are lowest at 10%. You also begin a relevant comparison by stating that 600 children under 11 attend ballet. However, the response ends mid-sentence at “age 11 to 16 number of,” so the dance-type chart is not meaningfully summarised and there is no overall overview of its main pattern. The task is therefore addressed only partially, with key information missing. The response is also 112 words, below the required 150; 16 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Complete the age-group comparisons and add a concise overview of the main contrasts in both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence: it introduces the charts, reports location figures, and then moves to the age-group chart. Connectors such as “On the other hand,” “While,” and “At the end” show an attempt to link information. However, the progression is interrupted because the final sentence stops before completing the comparison, and the location figures are presented as a list rather than grouped into a clear overview and supporting details. Some transitions are also not well suited to the relationships between the figures. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for the two charts, begin with the main patterns, and then support each with selected data. Ensure every sentence is complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “pie chart,” “bar chart,” “age group,” and “private studios,” and the reader can generally identify the categories and figures you mean. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are unnatural, such as “the most huge dance classes,” “give the 10%,” and “give the result of classes.” There are also spelling errors, including “informaion” and “dancxe,” which reduce accuracy. Choose precise reporting verbs and standard expressions for proportions and attendance. For example, say that a location “accounts for” a share, or that students “attend” a class. Avoid repeating “dance classes” when a clear reference to the category is sufficient.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with linking words, and some basic information remains understandable. However, grammatical control is uneven, particularly in longer constructions. In “The pie chart and bar chart illustrates,” the plural subject requires “illustrate”; “the most huge dance classes in the private studios that which are 48%” has a faulty sentence structure; and “the number of students under the age 11 which are 600” contains problems with the article, preposition, and clause structure. The final sentence is incomplete, which also makes the age comparison unclear. Build shorter, complete sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and articles, then add comparisons using controlled clauses such as “whereas” or “compared with.”

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