Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrates the location of dance classes that are currently attending by the young peope in a town in Australia and their types that are categorized in three types with the two age groups.

Overall, the private studios have a largest proportion and college-based studios having the smallest percentage among all. Whereas, ballet have largest number of students how are under 11 and smalled number for the age group between 11 and 16 as compared to modern the situation is completely opposite.

In pie chart private studios have largest share of 48% where school hall having a share of 24% and community halls and other having the share of 18% and the college-based studios is on lowest proportional with the prcentage of 10.

The bar graph represents three types of dance class such as ballet, tap, and modern and having two age groups such as under 11 and age between 11 and 16. There are 650 student in ballet how are under 11 which is most populated classes among all and tap dances classes having lowest number of student.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and give a relevant overview: private studios account for the largest share, college-based studios the smallest, and the age pattern for ballet and modern differs. The location percentages are reported accurately. However, the bar-chart account is incomplete and includes a notable misreading: you give 650 for under-11 ballet, whereas the chart shows about 600. You also say tap has the fewest students without specifying the age group; in fact, modern is lowest for under-11s, while ballet is lowest for 11–16-year-olds. Include the remaining figures and compare the age groups across all three dance styles. This would make the main features more fully and clearly supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement, moving from an introduction and overview to separate descriptions of the pie chart and bar graph. This makes the two sources easy to identify. The overview also attempts to connect the age-group patterns, which is useful. However, progression within the bar-chart paragraph is limited: it introduces the categories but then reports only one figure and a vague statement about tap. Some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “and” and the contrast marker “Whereas” at the start of a sentence. Develop the comparisons in a consistent order—for example, compare under-11 and 11–16 figures for ballet, tap, and modern—and use clear references to avoid ambiguity.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “share,” “percentage,” “age groups,” and “bar graph,” so the topic is generally clear. There is also some attempt to vary wording, such as “largest share” and “lowest proportional.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, including “currently attending by,” “most populated classes,” and “lowest proportional”; spelling errors such as “peope,” “smalled,” and “prcentage” also reduce control. Repetition of “having a share” and “number of student” limits flexibility. Aim for precise collocations commonly used to describe data, such as “accounted for,” “the smallest proportion,” and “the number of students,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast between the age patterns and clauses beginning with “where.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some statements awkward. For example, “the private studios have a largest proportion” needs a more accurate article and structure, while “ballet have largest number” has subject–verb and article errors. The sentence beginning “Whereas” is also incomplete as written, and “There are 650 student in ballet how are under 11” contains several grammatical problems. Practise complete comparisons with accurate plural forms and subject–verb agreement, then proofread each sentence for articles and clause structure.

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