Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart illustrates the data on the kinds and geographical locations of dance classes taken nowadays by youngsters in a suburb in Australia. Nearly half is occupied by private studios while other half is attained by college-based studios, school halls, community halls and others.The major individuals who attend ballet classes are minors while the modern dance classes are mostly attended by teenagers. Individuals in Tap classes are almost similar in number.

The location of dance classes is private studios in 48% of cases, while 24% is school halls, 10% are in college-based studios, 18% is community halls and others.

The youngsters who are taking the ballet classes are mojorly teenagers in the age group of 11 to 16. In tap classes, teenagers as well as minor are almost equal in number, minors are only lower in numbers as 20. In modern classes, minors are su in

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two chart topics and give some relevant comparisons, including the 48% share for private studios and the broad contrast between ballet and modern dance. However, the age-group comparisons are repeatedly reversed: under-11s, not 11–16-year-olds, are the larger ballet group (about 600 versus 300), while teenagers lead in modern dance (about 520 versus 300). Tap numbers are close, but the claim that minors are lower by 20 is not supported by the chart, which shows roughly 450 versus 420. The final sentence is unfinished, and the overview is therefore incomplete. The response also falls three words short of the required minimum. Report the main patterns accurately and complete the comparison of both age groups across all three styles.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening summary is followed by details about locations and dance styles. This gives the reader some sense of the chart’s two parts. However, progression is weak because the first paragraph already introduces comparisons that are repeated or contradicted later, such as the ballet age groups. The transition from location data to age-group data is not clearly managed, and the final line, “minors are su in,” stops mid-sentence, leaving the report unfinished. Some linking is present through “while” and “In tap classes,” but relationships between points are not consistently clear. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and key details, and group the age comparisons systematically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “pie chart,” “private studios,” “school halls,” “ballet,” and “teenagers,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing the data: “geographical locations” is unnecessarily broad, “Nearly half is occupied” does not clearly describe a proportion, and “major individuals” is not an appropriate way to refer to the largest age group. “Minors” is also less precise than naming the under-11 group, while “nowadays” and “suburb” add details not established by the chart. Spelling errors such as “mojorly” further reduce control. Prefer precise chart language such as “accounted for,” “the largest group,” and “students aged under 11.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes some simple and compound sentence forms, for example, “Nearly half is occupied by private studios while other half is attained by…” and “In tap classes, teenagers as well as minor are almost equal in number.” However, sentence control is inconsistent, and several errors make the meaning difficult to follow. In the first example, the article is missing before “other half,” and the verb pattern is awkward; the later sentence has agreement problems in “teenagers … are” followed by “minors are only lower.” Punctuation is also faulty, with a missing space after “others.” and an unfinished final sentence. Aim for complete, clearly structured sentences, check subject–verb agreement and articles, and proofread punctuation before submitting.

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