Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the location and the bar graph demostrates the types of classes in Australia.

Overall, it is evident that private studios clearly dominate, whereas the college-based studios accout for smallest share and the under 11 has the largest number of students ofballet dance. While, between the age of 11 to 16 students is more than all in modern dance.

Regarding the pie chart, private studio accounted for 48%. Followed by school halls at 24% while the college-based studios stand at 10% make it the smallest portion and community halls and other is almost twice as college-based studios at 18%.

Turning to the bar chart, ballet dance have a huge number of students under 11 is 600 and the small number of students that are 11 to 16 is 300. While, the tap dance students that are under 11 is 450 and 11 to 16 is 430. The Modern dance students are less in under 11 accounts for 300 as same as the students of ballet dance that are 11 to 16. Modern students between 11 and 16 are stand at 520

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main contrasts: private studios are the largest location category, college-based studios the smallest, and the age groups show different preferences across dance styles. The overview is relevant, and most figures are reported accurately. However, the statement that community halls are “almost twice” the college-based share is imprecise: 18% is less than twice 10%. The tap figure for the older group is given as 430 rather than approximately 420. The overview also says under-11s have the largest number of ballet students, but could more clearly summarise the broader pattern: younger students favour ballet, while older students favour modern dance. More precise comparisons and a concise overview of both charts would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the pie chart and bar chart. This makes the information easy to locate, and transitions such as “Regarding the pie chart” and “Turning to the bar chart” help signal the shift in focus. Some linking is less effective or mechanical, however. “While,” begins incomplete or awkwardly connected statements in the overview and final paragraph, and the sequence of figures in the bar-chart paragraph could be organised more consistently by age group or dance type. The final sentence also lacks a clear concluding punctuation mark. Use complete comparisons and a more deliberate sequence to make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “share,” “portion,” and “students,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range is somewhat repetitive, especially with repeated uses of “students,” “number,” and “dance.” Several word-choice or spelling problems reduce precision: “demostrates” and “accout” are misspelled, while “a huge number” is informal and vague for an academic report. Phrases such as “the smallest portion” and “stand at” are also used awkwardly in context. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and more varied terms for proportions and figures; this would make the report more precise without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer structures, including contrasts introduced by “whereas” and “while,” but control is inconsistent. Errors occur in verb agreement and sentence construction: “ballet dance have” should be “ballet classes have,” and “Modern students between 11 and 16 are stand at 520” combines incompatible verb forms. The sentence beginning “Ballet dance have a huge number of students under 11 is 600” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Articles and plural forms are sometimes missing or awkward, as in “the under 11” and “the small number of students that are 11 to 16.” Use a reliable pattern such as “The number of under-11 students taking ballet was 600,” then vary it with accurate comparison clauses.

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