Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the data on the location and types of dance classes young people in atown in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, it is clear that private studios accounted for largest proportion whereas college- based studios holding small portion in chart. Similarly, modern type of dancers particularly adults are participating more.

The community halls and other are thrice lesser than private studios 18% and 58% respectively. While school halls aare halve of the private studios percentage by 24%. However college-based studios are experienced the smallest portion among all three location of dance classes.

In addition, under 11 years children are participating in ballet by 600 in number which is highest compared to other type of dances whereas 11-16 age people are participating less by 300. On the other hand, 11-16 years age adults are showing interest in modern dance by participating more than 500. However, lunder 11 years old children are less in number in the modern dance by participating 300. Whereas, tap has nearly equal response from both children by 420 and 450 respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and provide an overview, identifying private studios as the most common location and college-based studios as the least common. You also select relevant comparisons across the age groups and dance styles. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: community halls are 18% compared with 48% for private studios, not 58%, and this is less than half rather than “thrice lesser.” The description of school halls as half the private-studio figure is also imprecise, since 24% is exactly half of 48%. Your overview says “adults” are more interested in modern dance, but the chart refers to the 11–16 age group. Develop the key comparisons more precisely and avoid unsupported labels.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of location and dance types. This makes the main topics easy to identify. You also use linking expressions such as “Similarly,” “In addition,” and “On the other hand” to connect points. However, some links are mechanical or do not clearly express the relationship between the figures. For example, “However” introduces the smallest location category, where a contrast is not necessary, and “Whereas” begins a fragment-like final point. The paragraph about dance types moves between ballet, modern and tap without a fully controlled sequence. Grouping the age comparisons by dance style, and using fewer but more precise transitions, would make the progression clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “proportion,” “participating,” and “interest,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons you intend. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “thrice lesser,” “small portion in chart,” and “showing interest … by participating more than 500.” “Adults” is also an imprecise label for the 11–16 group. These choices sometimes make the data description harder to interpret, while repeated use of “participating” limits variety. Aim for standard chart language and precise terms for quantities, such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “the number of students.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “which,” and most of the intended meaning remains understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur. The opening has a missing space in “atown,” and “private studios accounted for largest proportion” needs an article before “largest.” In “college-based studios holding small portion,” the verb form does not fit the sentence, and “school halls aare halve” contains errors in both the verb and the comparison structure. Several sentences beginning with “While,” “Whereas,” or “However” are not joined smoothly to a main clause. Practise complete sentence structures and check articles, verb forms, and punctuation when editing.

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