Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates various locations of dance classes while the bar chart illustrates various types of dance classes attended by students of various age groups.

Private studios share major part in the pie chart upto 48%. School halls are second major with 24% share while community halls & others share 18%. Meanwhile,College based studios covers the least portion about 10%.

The bar chart compares different types of dance classes attended by students of various age groups. A significant number of students upto 600 under 11 attended ballet classes while least number of them about 300 attended modern classes. In contrast, a huge number of students, more than 500 falling under age group 11-16 attended modern classes while trivial strength of them approximately 300 attended ballet classes. Tap classes are attended almost equally by both age groups of students.

To sum up, both charts compare various dance locations, classes and number of students attending those classes, with different age groups attending different classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and report several key figures accurately: private studios account for 48%, school halls 24%, community halls and other venues 18%, and college-based studios 10%. You also identify the main age-group contrasts: under-11s favour ballet, while 11–16-year-olds favour modern, and tap participation is similar. However, the overview is mostly a general restatement that the charts compare locations and classes, rather than a concise summary of their most notable patterns. Some details are also imprecise: “almost equally” for tap is reasonable, but the figures are about 450 and 420; “trivial strength” for 300 ballet students is an unclear description. Make the overview more specific and report comparisons consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on locations, a paragraph comparing dance types by age, and a concluding sentence. This makes the information easy to follow, and transitions such as “In contrast” help signal the shift between age groups. The progression is generally logical, though the final “To sum up” sentence repeats the introduction rather than synthesising the main findings. Some linking is also mechanical, and the long bar-chart paragraph would be clearer if the comparisons were grouped more deliberately—for example, first comparing ballet and modern across age groups, then noting the similar tap figures. This would retain the coherent structure while making connections more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing charts, including “illustrates,” “compares,” “share,” and “attended.” Some attempts at less common or emphatic wording are not natural or precise in this context: “share major part,” “huge number,” “trivial strength,” and “least number” make the comparisons less clear or sound overly evaluative. “College based” also needs a hyphen when used before “studios,” and “upto” should be written as two words. Prefer neutral, conventional data language such as “accounted for,” “the largest number,” and “approximately.” More precise collocations would help you describe the figures without changing their meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, and most of the comparisons remain understandable. There are some errors in sentence construction and punctuation, however. In “Private studios share major part in the pie chart upto 48%,” the noun phrase needs an article and the sentence structure is awkward; a clearer form would be “Private studios account for 48%.” In “College based studios covers,” the plural subject requires “cover,” while “students, more than 500 falling under age group 11-16 attended” has an unclear clause structure. There are also missing spaces after commas, as in “Meanwhile,College.” Aim for complete, well-formed comparison sentences and check subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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