Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the data of locations where the citizens attend the dance classes and the bar graph provides the data of types of dance classes and also shows the age group of the attendents, of a town in Australia.

The most commonly used location are the private studios in which the 48% of the people take classes.On the other hand the least common used location is the college based studios with only 10% of the attendies. 24% of the total dance students use school halls after the the school. Remaining 18% of the students attend the classes in hte community halls and other locations.

The Ballet dance is the most common dance type among the citizens of age under 11, having 600 dance students, while it the least common dancr type among the peopkle aged 11to16.On the other hand modern dance is the least common type among the under 11 students, having only 300 attendies and most common type of dance for the people of age 11 to 16, having more then 500 students. The tap dance is mostly loved by the under 11 childern.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify several important comparisons: private studios are the largest location category at 48%, college-based studios the smallest at 10%, and ballet and modern show contrasting age-group patterns. Most figures are reported accurately. However, the overview is not clearly separated from the details, and the final comparison is incomplete: “The tap dance is mostly loved by the under 11 childern” does not report that tap participation is similar in both groups (about 450 under-11s and 420 aged 11–16). Also, calling ballet the least common type for 11–16 is correct, but its figure of about 300 would make the comparison clearer. A concise overview of the main patterns and fuller reporting of tap would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a generally understandable order: it first describes the location chart, then moves to dance types, and uses contrasts such as “On the other hand” to connect comparisons. This gives the information a coherent overall arrangement. However, the opening sentence is overloaded, and the body paragraphs mainly list individual figures rather than grouping the most important patterns. Some linking is mechanical or imprecise; for example, “On the other hand” is repeated, while “Remaining 18%” does not clearly signal the relationship to the preceding figures. Use a distinct overview after the introduction, then organise the details into meaningful comparisons, such as location shares and age-group differences. Clearer referencing would also help readers follow which group each figure describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “pie chart,” “bar graph,” “most common,” “least common,” and “attend,” so the topic is generally clear. There is some repetition of “students,” “people,” and “dance type,” and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate: “the data of locations” is less natural than “the proportions by location,” while “mostly loved” describes preference rather than the number attending. Spelling errors such as “attendies,” “dancr,” “peopkle,” and “childern” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, neutral reporting language and check spelling carefully. Alternatives such as “accounted for,” “participation,” and “approximately” would help you describe the figures more naturally without overstating what the charts show.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “while” and “having,” and the main comparisons are usually understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. For example, “The most commonly used location are” should use a singular verb, and “the 48%” should be “48%.” The sentence beginning “The Ballet dance is…” becomes difficult to follow because “while it the least common” is missing a verb; write “while it is the least common…” Also, “24% of the total dance students use…” would be clearer as “24% of students attend classes in school halls.” Check punctuation after full stops and avoid joining clauses without a clear grammatical structure. These corrections would improve control while retaining your range.

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