Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illsutrates the information of locations about dance classes in community halls, school halls, private studios and collage based studios. The bar graph show the various types of dances by age group that are consist of Ballet, Tap and Modern dances are currently attending young people in a town of Australia.

Overall, most of the location which is around half of the places are occupied by private studios and least coverage of collage based studios. The people which are under 11 took most classes of Ballet, although 11-16 age group participate same in Ballet and Tap.

Private studios covered most of the locations for there dance classes which 48%. Another contribtor is most of the classes are take place in school halls 24% and College-based studio are the least one which is 10%. Community halls and other providing classes in 18% of area.

The bar graph shows the different classes of dance according to the ages. Ballet classes are mostly take

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify both visuals and report several accurate location figures, including private studios at 48%, school halls at 24%, community halls at 18%, and college-based studios at 10%. The overview also correctly highlights private studios as the largest share and college-based studios as the smallest. However, the account of the age-group chart is incomplete: it stops after “Ballet classes are mostly take” and gives no usable comparisons or figures for tap and modern dance. The overview’s claim that 11–16-year-olds participate equally in ballet and tap is also inaccurate; their figures are about 300 and 420 respectively. To address the task more fully, summarise the main contrasts across all three dance types and both age groups, using the chart’s approximate values.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on locations, and a final paragraph beginning the age-group comparison. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and “Overall” signals a summary. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph is unfinished and does not develop the second chart. Connections between ideas are sometimes awkward or unclear, as in “Another contribtor is most of the classes are take place…” The overview also combines a correct location summary with a confusing age-group statement. Use one focused paragraph for each chart, complete the comparisons, and link related figures with clear contrasts such as “whereas” or “by comparison.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “pie chart,” “bar graph,” “age group,” “private studios,” and the dance-style names, so the topic is generally clear. There is also some attempt to vary wording with “occupied,” “coverage,” and “contributor.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “locations about dance classes,” “least coverage,” and “providing classes in 18% of area.” Spelling errors, including “illsutrates,” “collage,” and “contribtor,” further reduce precision. Aim for standard chart-reporting collocations and accurate spelling: for example, say that classes “are held at” a venue and that a venue “accounts for” a percentage. This would make the limited range more precise and easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “The people which are under 11…” and a comparison in the overview. However, complex constructions are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to interpret. For example, “The bar graph show” has subject–verb disagreement, while “which are consist of” uses an incorrect verb pattern. The sentence beginning “Private studios covered…” also lacks a clear grammatical link before the percentage. Articles, plurals, and verb forms need closer control. Build accurate short sentences first, then add comparisons using reliable patterns such as “The figure for X was…, compared with…” and check agreement and sentence boundaries.

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