Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the location of dance classes. The bar chart provide information about various typr of dance classes and age groups.

Overall, It can be observed that private studios largest proportion in other categories, while community halls & other hit a low accounted of dance classes. Ballet dance highest in under 11 age group people.

To begin with, Private studios largest proportion approximatey 48%. Follwing by, school halls ( after-school) location acoounted 24% . Furthermore, fourth location of community halls and other classes around 18%,. in compared to, college-based studios started at 10%.

Secondly, There are three dances which is fluctuate in various age. Ballet dance highest prefer under 11 age group people, whereas 11-16 age are choose same dance around 300 students. Tap dance peak the higher point around 450 students. Follwing by, that figure slightly decrease approximately 400 students. However, modern dance highest in 11-16 age group around 530 learners. while under 11 age group that figure stood at 300 students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify both charts and report several relevant figures, including the 48% share for private studios and the contrast between age groups in ballet and modern dance. The overview also recognises private studios as the largest location category and ballet as most popular among under-11s. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not summarise the main contrast in dance preferences across the age groups, and the statement that community halls “hit a low” is inaccurate because college-based studios are the smallest category. Some details are also unclear or misreported: tap is about 450 for under-11s and 420 for ages 11–16, so it does not peak at 450 and then decrease as described. Select the key comparisons accurately and state them clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for the location and dance-type charts. This helps the reader follow the broad topic. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven, and some linking phrases are used mechanically or do not express the intended relationship. For example, “Follwing by” and “in compared to” interrupt the location comparisons, while “Secondly” does not clearly connect the two charts. The final paragraph moves between age groups and dance styles without consistently identifying which figure belongs to which group. Organise each comparison in a clear sequence and use accurate references such as “among under-11s” and “by contrast” to make relationships easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted,” “age group,” and “approximately,” and the reader can generally understand the categories being compared. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “hit a low,” “dance highest prefer,” and “started at 10%.” Spelling errors including “typr,” “approximatey,” and “Follwing” also reduce accuracy. Some expressions are repeated, particularly “figure” and “dance.” Build a more precise set of terms for describing chart values and preferences, and check spelling carefully. For example, use “accounted for” when reporting a share and “was most popular” when describing a preferred dance style.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few complex comparisons, using structures such as “whereas” and “while,” but control is inconsistent. Errors occur in basic sentence patterns as well as longer clauses: “The bar chart provide” has subject–verb disagreement, and “private studios largest proportion” is missing a verb and article. In “There are three dances which is fluctuate,” the relative clause has faulty agreement and verb construction. Articles, plurals and punctuation are also unreliable, as in “the under 11 age group people” and the comma after “18%.” These errors sometimes make relationships difficult to interpret. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and punctuation; accurate simple comparisons should come before adding more complex clauses.

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