Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart distributes the information about location of dance classes for teenagers and bar chart compare the data between three kinds of dances classes in Australia

Overall,there are four locations where dance classes are conducted and they teach three types of dances which are Tap,Ballet and Modern specifically for teenagers of age between 11 to 16 Moreover, there are maximum 600 students who are currently learning dance in Australia.

If we look at the pie chart we came to know that majority of dance classes which is almost 48% of total chart are located in private studio where as minimum number is 10% are in college based studio.However only 18% dance classes are conducted in community halls and other which is second lowest percentage.Furthermore school halls also use for dance teacing purpose and its percentage is only 24%.

On the other hand, in Austaralia there are only three kinds of dance classes which are Ballet, Tap and Modern maximum number of students which are 600 intent to learn Ballet and under 11 student more interested in learning as compare to the age group between 11-16 where as 450 student take part in Tap dance which these classes under 11 are also more interested compare to other group if we talk about Modern maximum students are 520 and in this type age group between 11-16 shows greater interest.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify both chart topics and report several key figures accurately, including private studios at 48%, college-based studios at 10%, and the 600 under-11 students taking ballet. You also recognise the contrast in modern dance, where the older group is more numerous. However, the overview is unclear and includes an unsupported claim that there are “maximum 600 students” overall; 600 is a figure for one age-and-dance category, not the total. The response also describes the classes as being for teenagers, although the chart includes children under 11. Some comparisons are incomplete or imprecise, particularly for tap and the age-group totals. A clearer overview of the main contrasts, followed by accurate comparisons across both age groups, would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the pie chart and bar chart. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and transitions such as “On the other hand” help signal a shift between charts. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several comparisons are packed into long sentences, especially the final sentence about ballet, tap, and modern. Linking phrases such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” are occasionally used without adding a clear new overview point. Organise the bar-chart details into shorter comparisons by age group or dance style, and use references such as “the younger group” consistently to make relationships clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “located,” “conducted,” “students,” and “age group,” so the topic is generally understandable. There is also some attempt to vary wording, for example “shows greater interest.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “maximum number of students … intent to learn,” “minimum number is 10%,” and “dance teacing purpose.” Spelling errors, including “Austaralia” and “teacing,” also reduce control. In addition, “dance classes” is sometimes used where the chart reports numbers of students attending each dance type. Build a more precise set of expressions for describing proportions and student figures, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “whereas” and clauses beginning “if we talk about Modern.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors sometimes make the relationships between figures unclear. Examples include “bar chart compare,” “there are maximum 600 students,” and “450 student take part,” which show problems with subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural forms. Several sentences also run together without appropriate punctuation, particularly the overview and the final paragraph. Use shorter, complete sentences when comparing figures, and check agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries. More accurate control of these basic patterns would make your comparisons easier to understand.

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