Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrates location and types of dance classes in a town in australia and number of students attending the dance classes.

Overall, out of four dance locations private studios accounted for the highest proportion, at 48%. Whereas, college-based studios stood at 10% which is the lowest among all dance locations. Under 11 years age group ballet dance type has the highest number of students, at 600. Whereas 11-16 age group modern dance type represented around 530 students.

According to the Location of Classes, private studios accounted for highest proportion, at 48%. Whereas, school halls are used as dance hall after school finished represented half of private studios which is of 24%. Community halls and other represented 18%. Finally, college-based studios stood for lowest proportion which is of 10%.

Turning to dance types and number of students attending the classes, under 11 years age group, ballet dance group has accounted for 600 students which is highest among three types of dances. Whereas, tap and modern accounted for 450 and 300 respectively. Finally, students between 11-16 age group has attended for modern dance type in highest count around 530, whereas ballet and tap represented 300 and around 420 respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main features of both charts and give a clear overview: private studios are the most common location, college-based studios the least common, and the leading dance type differs by age group. The figures you report are generally accurate, including the location percentages and the under-11 figures. Your comparisons between age groups are also relevant, particularly the contrast between ballet for younger students and modern for older students. To make the report more fully developed, compare the age groups directly—for example, note that ballet participation falls from about 600 to 300, while modern rises from about 300 to just over 500. The overview is clear, but some details are presented separately rather than synthesised.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the location and dance-type charts. This makes the information easy to follow. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical because “Whereas” and “Finally” recur, and several sentences repeat information already given in the overview, such as the 48% and 10% location figures. Some links are also awkward: “According to the Location of Classes” does not smoothly introduce the details. Use a wider range of straightforward transitions and avoid repeating the same figures unless adding a comparison. Grouping related age-group contrasts in the final paragraph would also create a more connected progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use enough task-related vocabulary to describe the charts, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “represented,” and “highest.” These choices generally communicate the data, and the response shows some range beyond basic words. However, several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “dance hall after school finished,” “stood for lowest proportion,” and “attended for modern dance type.” Repeated use of “accounted for” and “represented” also limits flexibility. Choose concise collocations that fit statistical reporting, and use “participation” or “number of students” where appropriate. Check spelling and capitalisation as well: “Australia” should be capitalised, and “classes” is more natural than “dance group” when referring to the categories shown.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the main comparisons remain understandable. However, some errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction reduce accuracy. For example, “The charts illustrates” should be “The charts illustrate,” while “Under 11 years age group ballet dance type has” needs a clearer grammatical structure, such as “Among under-11s, ballet had…”. The repeated sentence pattern beginning with “Whereas” creates fragments because these clauses are not consistently joined to a main clause. There are also awkward constructions such as “students between 11-16 age group has attended.” Practise forming complete comparison sentences and checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and age-group phrasing.

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