Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts illustrate the location of dance studios in a town,where young people go for dance and there is divided by age.

Overall,the highest figure is private studio,while the lowest figure is collage based studio.

First of all,the private studio is more popular among youngsters,which is 48%.The community halls is second most popular studio,which is 18%.School halls is 24% as well as college based studio is 10%, which is very low figure.By the age,under 11 children mostly visit private studio.

At the end, majority of the young people visit private studio and the high figure is private studio, which is 48%.Moreover,college base studio is less popular, its 10%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the main location figures, including private studios as the largest share (48%) and college-based studios as the smallest (10%), and you include an overall statement. However, the response addresses only the location chart in any meaningful detail: it does not report the dance-type figures or compare the two age groups, despite the chart showing clear differences—for example, ballet is more popular among under-11s, while modern is highest among 11–16-year-olds. The claim that under-11s mostly visit private studios is not supported by the chart, which gives no location breakdown by age. The response is also 42 words below the required minimum, limiting the detail provided. To improve, summarise both charts, select key comparisons, and avoid conclusions the data cannot establish.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an overview to details, and uses simple signposts such as “Overall,” “First of all,” and “Moreover.” However, progression is limited because the same location information is repeated: private studios at 48% and college-based studios at 10% appear more than once, while the second chart is not incorporated. The paragraphing and links do not create a clear comparison between the charts. Some connections are also awkward, such as “School halls is 24% as well as college based studio is 10%.” Organise the report into a concise overview followed by separate, logically ordered details for location and dance types, using comparisons to connect related figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic topic vocabulary to communicate the main location data, including “private studio,” “community halls,” “popular,” and “figure.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or repetitive. “Collage based studio” is a misspelling of “college-based studio,” while “studio” is used for all locations even though school and community halls are not studios. Phrases such as “high figure” and “less popular” are repeated rather than using more precise language for proportions and comparisons. Aim for accurate chart vocabulary such as “accounted for,” “share,” and “proportion,” and distinguish venues from dance styles. This would make the description clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, with a few attempts to combine ideas using “while,” “which,” and “as well as.” These attempts are not consistently controlled. For example, “The community halls is second most popular studio” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “School halls is 24% as well as college based studio is 10%” joins two clauses awkwardly. There are also missing spaces after commas and full stops, and inconsistent sentence punctuation. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the basic figures, but they make the report less fluent. Practise accurate plural agreement and use a wider range of controlled comparison structures, such as “whereas” clauses and sentences with “accounted for.”

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