Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrate the location of dance classes, while the table provides data on types of dance classes of youth in a small coloniy of Austrailia peresent.

Overall, most of the dance classes held in private studios, whereas least in college-basesd studios. 11 to 16 years old individuals attend modren classes and under 11 years old mostlu like ballet and tap.

To commence with, the provate studios hold 48% studios. It is the biggest number and school halls after-school hours are at second number with 24%. Third number contains by the community halls and other. Persentage of it is 18. At last is clloege-based studios with the 10%.

There are two groups of people one is under 11 years old ond second is between 11 and 16 years old people. On the one hand, in modren dance classes higher number of people are more than 11 years old. They are almost 530 people. On the other hand, under 11 years are three hundred. In tap ballet classes under 11 years individuals are more. They are 460 in tap and 600 in gallet, while under 16 years are 430 in tap and three hundred in ballet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios are the largest share at 48%, while college-based studios are the smallest at 10%. You also compare the age groups across the dance styles, including the higher participation of younger children in ballet and older students in modern dance. These relevant features support a clear overview. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the overview says 11–16-year-olds attend modern classes, without noting that modern is also the leading style for that group, and the tap figures are reported as 460 and 430 rather than approximately 450 and 420. The comparison of the age groups in tap and ballet could be expressed more precisely. More complete, carefully checked comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on locations and a paragraph comparing dance styles. This gives the reader a generally logical route through the two charts, and phrases such as “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal contrasts. However, some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated ranking sequence “at second number,” “Third number” and “At last.” The final paragraph also shifts between styles and age groups in a way that makes the comparisons harder to follow; for example, “In tap ballet classes” combines two categories without a clear transition. Use topic sentences and organise the figures consistently by dance style or age group to make progression clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “percentage,” and “individuals,” so the reader can understand the subject and many comparisons. However, the range and control are limited by frequent spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural expressions. Examples include “coloniy,” “Austrailia,” “modren,” and “clloege-based,” as well as “hold 48% studios,” which does not clearly describe the chart’s share. Phrases such as “at second number” and “Third number contains by” are also not natural ways to rank categories. These issues sometimes slow the reader, even when the intended meaning can be inferred. Build a reliable set of chart-reporting collocations and proofread spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “whereas” and paired clauses beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand.” This shows some range, but control is inconsistent, and errors occur in basic sentence patterns as well as longer constructions. For example, “The pie chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “most of the dance classes held” is missing a verb. “There are two groups of people one is…” needs clearer clause boundaries and punctuation, and “under 11 years are three hundred” is grammatically incomplete. Articles and sentence structure also need attention. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete clauses and punctuation before adding more complex linking; this will make your comparisons easier to understand.

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