Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In today's world, transportation is big market to earn more money. However, individuals in many countries were buying different types of food and exports to various country to earn more profites. This essay will discuss both the view which impact beneficialpositive or detrimental negative development.

To commence, nowadays in many urban communities all the consumers went to the large supermarket and buying lunxry brand cloths as well as veraity of different food which the transport in many countries and rural areas whihc they earn more funds. Moreover, many urban soceity there are several items of food which so expensive that weathly adult eat. For instance, in India majority of many states they developing there traditional food which is popular in their country and citizen were exporting this food into abroad which forgine people enjoy trying new food in their respective lifestyle. Hence, this create positive development of there nation and their food in different sector.

On the other hand, in many countries residents missused due to they also transport the mitigate products such as, alcohol, drugs which make harmful effect. In addition, consumer are purchasing from the supermarket and cover with all products down side and exports in various countries so that they earn double money. For example, in Japan came at the first postion in developing drugs and harmful material. Nevertheless, their people which import all the food in many states and produced all over the world in which they hiden some non-useful items in transport and make negative development because youngster perffering to try and make big obstacle in their daily life.

To conclude, government have to lunched one programs that only the useful items likewise food and cloths to exports rather than stop all the danger material in the market to sell. Finally, it have a two coin side that pupils stop to eating detrimental products and make friendly enviroment to produce positiive development..

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to discuss both benefits and drawbacks, and the example of Indian traditional food being enjoyed abroad is relevant to the global availability of food. However, the response only partially answers the question because the task asks you to decide whether this development is positive or negative, while your position remains unclear: the introduction says it will discuss “both” views, and the conclusion presents a mixed recommendation without stating which side you support. Several points also move away from food availability, especially the references to clothing, drugs, and harmful materials. Explain more directly how access to imported food affects consumers, producers, or culture, and support a consistent overall judgement with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion, so there is a basic attempt to organise the discussion. Connectors such as “Moreover,” “For instance,” and “On the other hand” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph shifts from supermarkets and clothing to expensive food and exports, while the second moves from food imports to drugs and hidden items. Some links, such as “Hence” and “Nevertheless,” do not clearly express the relationship between the surrounding ideas. Build each paragraph around one clear point, then explain and illustrate it before moving on; use referencing that makes clear what “this” and “they” refer to.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You make an effort to use topic-related vocabulary, including “traditional food,” “exporting,” “import,” and “harmful effect,” and you attempt some less common expressions. However, the range is basic and many word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors strain the reader, as in “transportation is big market,” “lunxry brand cloths,” and “make big obstacle.” Some terms are also imprecise or unrelated to the central issue, such as “mitigate products” and “non-useful items.” Choose accurate vocabulary for international food trade and its effects, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise phrases such as “food imports,” “local producers,” and “consumer choice” would help you express relevant ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “which” and “because,” but control is limited and errors are frequent enough to obscure meaning. For example, “individuals … were buying different types of food and exports” combines incompatible verb forms, while “many urban society there are several items” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Agreement and tense are also inconsistent in “all the consumers went … and buying” and “this create positive development.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention as well, particularly in the long sentence beginning “Nevertheless, their people.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time, checking subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and complete sentence structure.

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