Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
It is believed by some that the aim of academic education to train people to support to society. Others argue that the objective of education is to accomplish personal ambition. In my opinion, both views equally important.
On the one hand, well-educated people significantly contribute to the economy because they can create ideas, technology, and business ideas that can promote social development. In addition, education helps people understand social responsibilities such as following rules and respecting others. For example, well-educated person population can help to reduce crime in society and increase cooperation between people. As a result, society becomes stable and developed.
On the other hand, education plays a crucial role in individual lives in different ways. Finally, it gives people knowledge, skills that help to find better job opportunities. For example, students who study engineering or medicine can earn higher salary and have better career opportunities. Secondly, education can increase personal confidence and ability to solve problems. This means they can achieve their goal easily. Therefore, it is clear that education is essential for personal development.
In conclusion, an educated population can benefit not only itself but also society as a whole.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly off-topic. The prompt asks about the global availability of food in supermarkets, but the essay discusses the purpose of education. Consequently, the task is not addressed. Furthermore, the response is only 193 words, failing to meet the 250-word minimum requirement. Because the content does not address the prompt at all, it cannot be evaluated for idea development or position. This results in a very low score for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is a basic attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'In addition', and 'In conclusion'. However, because the content is entirely irrelevant to the prompt, the logical progression is undermined. The structure is mechanical, and the flow of ideas is disjointed due to the lack of relevance to the topic. While the paragraphing is present, the overall coherence is severely impacted by the failure to engage with the actual task question.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for expressing simple ideas, such as 'social development', 'career opportunities', and 'personal confidence'. However, the range is limited and repetitive. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or sophisticated collocations. While the vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the student's (off-topic) points clearly, it lacks the variety and precision required for higher bands. There are no significant spelling errors, but the lexical range remains basic throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'It is believed by some that...' and 'Students who study engineering or medicine can earn...'. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the aim of academic education to train' (missing verb) and 'well-educated person population' (incorrect phrasing). Punctuation is generally functional, but the frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents a higher score. The grammar is sufficient for communication but lacks the control and flexibility expected at higher levels.
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