Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I think this is a positive development. I also prefer to go to a supermarket and buy food products all over the world because everyone is buying food for their daily life. Some people are buying food at streets and some people are from supermarket. When there is no consumers is going supermarket than how can supermarket manager and staff are survive. In supermarket there is very good food and healthy food in the supermarket. When we consumers buying a food from supermarket than supermarket is increasing day by day and they willing to pay salary to their staff.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the required word count of 250 words, reaching only 99 words. This failure to meet the length requirement severely limits the development of ideas. While you state that the development is positive, the supporting arguments are repetitive and lack depth. You mention the economic benefit to supermarket staff, but you do not address the broader implications of global food trade, such as environmental impact or local food security. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and ensure you meet the minimum word count to allow for a full discussion of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure, consisting of a single, short paragraph. There is no clear introduction, body, or conclusion. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is very limited. For example, the transition 'When there is no consumers is going supermarket than how can...' is grammatically incorrect and fails to link ideas logically. To improve, you should organize your essay into distinct paragraphs—one for the introduction, two for body arguments, and one for a conclusion—and use linking words like 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'however' to connect your sentences more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. You use the word 'supermarket' repeatedly throughout the short text, which limits your lexical range. There is no attempt to use less common or academic vocabulary. Phrases like 'very good food' are simplistic and lack the precision expected at higher band levels. To improve, you should focus on learning synonyms and topic-specific vocabulary related to global trade, economics, and food production. Expanding your range of adjectives and nouns will help you express your ideas with more clarity and sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

There are frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Examples include 'When there is no consumers is going supermarket' and 'they willing to pay salary.' These errors involve subject-verb agreement, incorrect verb forms, and misuse of prepositions. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that verb tenses are used correctly. Practicing the use of complex sentences with subordinate clauses will also help improve your score.

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