Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

i think this development is positive in the world. most of the people in many countries buy food products in supermarket because in supermarkets alot of food inside in market . there are different types of food stall inside the market. there are fresh foods stall, vegetables , fruits and frozen fast food , frozen meat etc. and a positive point when we are alone in the house. no one thing to eat them. and my family are not at home so am very hungry. and than i got idea than i am going to supermarket and bur sandwhich and frozen burger and i checked the date when this had made so the sandwhich and burger was totally freshed and when we open and eat it and its really good it smells like fresh and smoothy and other point of this topic that when we are travelling or make a plan to going outside or explore the new park so when we go outside in morning and had no breakfast than no restaurent are opens and we are hungry and than saw a super market so we decide to go to the super market and buy food and we entered the market and go to food section and buy food and freshly made and toast with butter and jam and got cold coffee inside everything you want inside the market you can got it an d the freshly made bakery products thats a positive point of buy foods from supermarket

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response takes a clear position that the availability of global food in supermarkets is a positive development. However, the ideas are presented in a very simplistic manner and are supported almost entirely by personal, anecdotal examples rather than broader social or economic arguments. While the prompt asks if this is a positive or negative development, the development itself—the global sourcing of food—is barely addressed; instead, the essay focuses on the general convenience of supermarkets. The ideas are under-developed, which corresponds to Band 5 in Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from a major structural flaw: it consists of a single, continuous, run-on paragraph without any breaks or proper punctuation. There are no clear paragraph divisions to separate different ideas or examples. Cohesive devices are extremely basic and repetitive, relying almost entirely on 'and' and 'than' (used instead of 'then'). Although there is a general chronological narrative of going to the supermarket, the lack of punctuation, capitalization, and logical paragraph progression severely impacts the readability and coherence of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted to everyday descriptive words such as 'food', 'market', 'good', and 'fresh'. There are numerous lexical limitations and inaccuracies, such as 'freshed' instead of 'fresh', 'smoothy' instead of 'smooth', and awkward collocations like 'fresh foods stall'. The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to communicate the basic meaning, reflecting the descriptors for Band 4. More advanced or precise terminology related to global trade, agriculture, or consumerism is entirely absent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatically, the response is very weak. The entire essay is written as one giant sentence joined by coordinating conjunctions ('and') rather than utilizing a mix of simple and complex structures. There is a complete absence of capital letters at the beginning of sentences and for the pronoun 'i'. Punctuation is entirely missing, leading to severe run-on errors. While simple subject-verb structures are occasionally present, the grammatical accuracy is severely compromised throughout, pulling the score down to Band 4.

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