Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In contemporary society, many manufacturing industries becoming the firt prioriety in all over the world, wgereas some belives consuming organic food or product is highly benefical for health. The market is only one that part of life where people goes and purchasing their desire product. But I consider that, it is partially right because consuming all product from a superkmarket is somewhere detrimental of the life expectancy of human. I will dicussed both my opinion in given paragraphs;

Manufacturing industries are rapidly increase their market , in first stage they produce product and send to the market but after that the real game is commenced with winning the heart of a consumer by distributing their favorute goods at resonable price. It is benefical for economy of the country as well as consumers but today`s purchers( consumers) also go to the market to acquire or purchase food product which means they are totally depend on fastfood or unhygiene cuisine but it`s good for in the sense of time saving approach however many people busy on their work so that they do not have adequate time to cook food themselves.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response makes an attempt to give a position, saying that buying food from supermarkets is “partially right” but can be “detrimental,” and it offers one relevant benefit: convenience for people who are busy and have little time to cook. However, it does not clearly evaluate the specific development in the question—access to food produced all over the world—and instead shifts towards manufacturing, organic food, and fast food. The position is therefore unclear, and the ideas are very limited and not supported with a specific example or explanation of imported food’s effects. The response also falls short of the required minimum length, leaving the argument substantially incomplete. To improve, state a clear positive or negative view and develop two relevant reasons with examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an opening paragraph and a body paragraph, and linking expressions such as “but,” “however,” and “so that” show an effort to connect ideas. Nevertheless, the progression is difficult to follow: the opening moves from manufacturing industries to organic food and then supermarkets, while the body shifts to production, marketing, fast food, and time-saving. The second paragraph also contains several ideas joined into long sentences, so their relationships are not always clear. The response ends without a conclusion, leaving the position unresolved. Use one paragraph for each main reason, begin each with a clear topic sentence, and use linking words only where the logical connection is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The writer attempts some topic-related vocabulary, including “manufacturing industries,” “consumer,” “economy,” and “life expectancy,” and uses phrases such as “time saving approach” to express a relevant idea. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret, for example “the real game is commenced with winning the heart of a consumer” and “consuming all product from a supermarket.” There are also frequent spelling errors, including “firt,” “prioriety,” “benefical,” and “superkmarket,” which reduce clarity. Aim for precise, natural phrases connected to the question, such as “internationally sourced food” and “a wider choice of products,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “whereas” and a reason clause beginning “because.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors sometimes make the intended relationships hard to follow. For example, “many manufacturing industries becoming” lacks a finite verb, while “people goes and purchasing” combines incompatible verb forms and has incorrect subject–verb agreement. The sentence beginning “Manufacturing industries are rapidly increase” also has an incorrect verb form, and several clauses are joined without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences with a subject and finite verb, then check agreement and verb forms. Shorter, controlled sentences would help make the argument clearer before adding more complex structures.

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