Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

#In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Supermarkets nowadays have variety of food products from different part of countries and consumers are allowed to purchase. This essay will discuss why this devlopment has negative consequences to the environment leading to carborn emission and excess use of fossil fuels.

One main reason is transporting goods from over sea requires multiple modes of commute. This leads to excess consumption of fossil fuels. For example, supermarkets near my home sells korean ramen which is imported from the Korea via ship (and other modes of transport) estimatedly need more fuel than normaly required. This results in vast amount of fossil fuel used up on importing food rather than using on somthing important.

Excess useage of fossil fuels directly afftects the environmnet.

Another major reason, Imported goods which are transported using different modes of commute release hamful caborn causing air pollution. For instance, ship carrying goods travelling across sea are the signidicant reason for polluting both air and water by dumping rubbish in water and emitting carborn. Therefore, pollutiong casued by importing this products are hamfull to the environment.

In conclusion, I believe this develpoment might have few postives to it, but the negative outweighs the mertis because it causes major evironmental risks like air pollution, carbon emission and water pollution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you consider worldwide food availability a negative development, mainly because of fuel use and pollution. Both body paragraphs give relevant reasons, and the ramen example helps make the transport argument concrete. However, the response develops only one broad area—environmental harm—and the second paragraph largely repeats the first rather than adding a distinct, fully explained consequence. The conclusion briefly acknowledges possible positives but does not identify or weigh any, so the discussion of the question is partial. The response is also 210 words, below the 250-word minimum; 44 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop a separate point or explain the consequences in greater depth, and address the positive side before reaching your judgement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “One main reason,” “Another major reason,” and “In conclusion” make the stages easy to identify. However, progression between the body paragraphs is limited because both focus on transport-related environmental damage, and the second repeats the first point rather than extending the argument. Some links are also awkward or unclear, as in “Therefore, pollutiong casued by importing this products,” which makes the relationship between the example and the claim harder to follow. Use each paragraph for a distinct reason, then connect the example explicitly to its consequence. Clearer referencing and less formulaic transitions would make the overall progression more effective.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “fossil fuels,” “air pollution,” “imported goods,” and “carbon emission,” so the reader can understand the main environmental argument. There are also attempts at more specific wording, such as “multiple modes of commute.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled forms distract the reader: “carborn,” “hamfull,” “develpoment,” and “merits.” Some combinations are unnatural, including “vast amount of fossil fuel used up” and “polluting both air and water by dumping rubbish.” Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “transport emissions” and “environmental impact” would help you express the argument efficiently without repeating the same vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “goods which are transported using different modes” and a reason-result structure with “This leads to…”. The main ideas are generally understandable, but errors in sentence construction and agreement occur often enough to affect fluency. For example, “Supermarkets … have variety” needs an article, while “supermarkets near my home sells” has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence beginning “Another major reason, Imported goods…” is a fragment or faulty connection, and “ship carrying goods travelling” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, agreement, and punctuation when joining clauses.

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