Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The peoples go to the supermarkets and buy food produced all over the world. Many peoples go to the spermarket and buy things to use in the daily life such as floor, milk,and etc. These things can make very hardly thats why people go in the supermarkets and buy things easily.

Yes, the peoples go in the super markets and buy food produced all other the world because these food can make very hardly and many peoples live in the cities. They cannot make these things thats why this is the positive things can peoples go to the supermarkets and buy all kinds of food produced al over the world. The citizen can buy food very easily because supermarkets is available in the big cities. Most of the people can live in the cities and they ccan buy milk in the villages because the milk is freshed in the villages and bufflos is available in the villages. So this is the positive development.

Moreover, these peoples can live in the villages all over the world and foods such as wheat floor, milk and all kind of food are make villages is very easily but all facilities are availble in the villages also go to the cities to purchase the food in the supermarkets. So, this is negative development and negative creativity because all kinds of facilities are available in the villages. All kinds of peoples can live in the villages to make food in the villages.

In conclusions, they peoples live in the villages to creake food in the villages because all facilities are available in the villages like farming and farming instruments. Those poeples live in the cities they cannot make food in the cities so they go to the supermarkets to buy all kind of foods.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a positive view at first, saying supermarkets make food easy to buy, and you mention that city residents may not be able to produce food themselves. However, the response does not develop a clear answer to the question: the third paragraph calls the development negative, and the conclusion shifts to village farming without resolving this contradiction. Much of the discussion focuses on whether people can grow food in villages rather than on the effects of access to food from around the world. To improve, state one position clearly and support it with relevant, explained reasons—for example, greater choice or year-round access, balanced against possible effects on local producers. The response meets the stated length requirement; eight words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, and linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “In conclusions” show awareness of how to connect points. However, ideas are not arranged in a coherent progression: the second paragraph supports a positive view, while the next labels the same development negative, and the conclusion does not settle this conflict. Repeated references to villages and food production also make it difficult to follow the central argument. Some connections, such as “So, this is negative development,” do not follow clearly from the preceding point. Plan a simple structure—position, two supporting reasons, and a conclusion—and use each paragraph to develop one distinct point with clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “food,” “people,” “villages,” and “available.” Some wording makes the intended meaning difficult to understand, as in “these food can make very hardly” and “negative creativity.” There are also spelling errors, including “spermarket,” “availble,” and “poeples,” which reduce clarity. You do use a few relevant terms, such as “supermarkets,” “farming,” and “farming instruments,” but the range is not yet sufficient to express the task’s ideas precisely. Build topic vocabulary for global food access and its effects, and check spelling and collocations. For instance, explain whether imported products increase consumer choice or create competition for local farmers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You mainly use simple sentence patterns, with some attempts to join ideas using “because” and “so.” These attempts show an emerging ability to form longer sentences, but errors in sentence structure and basic grammar are frequent. Examples include “Many peoples go,” “these food can,” “supermarkets is available,” and “they peoples live,” where number agreement or sentence formation is inaccurate. The sentence “They cannot make these things thats why…” also joins two complete ideas without suitable punctuation or a clear grammatical link. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries before adding more complex structures. Clear, controlled simple sentences will make your reasoning easier to understand.

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