Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In today's world, majority of many countries are transporting the food and other matrial from taking supermarket and sell all over the world and earn more money. However, transport is the significant role to make more profit in our respective lifestyle. I will discuss both view in the given below at terminate.

At the initial stage, individuals today making smartwork with assist of internet and delivers the major food products, namely Mango, Banana, Chocolate. Moreover, residents are purchasing food from supermarket at high ammount of discount and store in their fridge to make frash food hence it will not waste as well as it also create positive development in their urban society. Not only transporting food item but also nowadays in various countries they export many different products from one country to onther. For instance, In india now many thins which are exporting all over the world and the name of the companies is " benificial transport" which are available in the internet.

On the other hand, producing all over the world with fantasic material is harmful due to they have to pass out from Mitigate chek post. Consequently, citizens are input the wrong item with truck and it will cause in the cheking dipartment although it will be arrested. Furthermore, many compaines at persent giving detrimental food and create obesity in their repetive lifestyle causes many diesaes after eating the food and it make negative development in their major Urban center. For Example, a few months ago the food department had arrested all the worker in the industry that make food owing to this food which make many dangerous health issues.

To conclude, government ought to stop transport the material from one to onther state. As a result, adults make negative afftected to that transpoting the alcohol and durgs with make negative obstacle. From my prespective, individuals have to take all the food from their country rather than not transport into different country. Their country food which was frash and healthy therefore they try to ate more.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to discuss both positive and negative effects and give a final view: for example, you mention discounts and access to food, then raise concerns about unhealthy products and conclude that people should buy locally. However, the response only partially answers the question because the central issue—whether access to food produced around the world is a positive or negative development—is often replaced by discussion of transport, exports, customs checks, alcohol and drugs. Your position is also difficult to follow: you say you will discuss both views, but do not clearly state which side you support until the conclusion. Develop a few directly relevant reasons, explain how each affects consumers, and use specific, credible examples rather than unclear company or arrest claims.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify an intended structure. You also use linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude.” However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from internet use to discounts, exports and an unexplained company, while the second shifts from customs checks to obesity and arrests. Some connectors do not show a clear relationship between the ideas, and references such as “this food” are hard to interpret. Organise each paragraph around one relevant main point, then explain and illustrate it in sequence; make the conclusion follow directly from the position established in the introduction.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “supermarket,” “discount,” “export,” “detrimental,” and “obesity,” and some choices show an effort to express more complex ideas. However, vocabulary is often basic, repetitive, or inaccurate enough to strain understanding. Phrases such as “smartwork,” “fantasic material,” “Mitigate chek post,” and “negative obstacle” are unclear or unsuitable in context; spelling errors such as “frash,” “ammount,” and “compaines” also reduce precision. Several expressions appear to be chosen without a clear meaning, making it difficult to understand the examples. Prefer familiar, accurate wording and check spelling, word forms, and collocations. For instance, describe “imported food” and its “environmental impact” rather than using unclear transport-related phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You try to use both simple and more extended sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “although,” “owing to,” and “rather than.” However, control is weak across sentence structures, and frequent errors sometimes distort the intended meaning. Examples include “majority of many countries are transporting,” “individuals today making,” and “it also create,” where articles, verb forms, or agreement are missing or incorrect. Some clauses are joined in ways that make their relationship unclear, as in “Consequently, citizens are input the wrong item with truck and it will cause in the cheking dipartment although it will be arrested.” Work first on complete, clearly structured sentences, accurate subject–verb agreement, and consistent verb forms. Then add subordinate clauses only when their meaning and grammatical connection are clear.

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