Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

I think it is positive development and people getting many benefits from such type of development.I appreciate this technology because can access to everythngs n the world .

firstly ,if we see in our country many of food that we use in our daily life are not made in our countries .It is good type of development,because they can take access to everything even that is not made in our country.If we in our life, noodles that is actually made iin china but it is available in all over the world .people can taste many kind of things by this development and experienced it.

I like this development because it increase our knowledge about many things whether itb is related to market thngs or others.many of things that is actually used in hometown are not made in our country but still we can take thier advantages of this ..it is just beacuse of technology or development .

A few months ago ,my czn was seriously ill .He had brain cancer and the doctors in pakistan said that suitable machinary arev not avilabla in our hospital.Then i call to one of my classmate .His uncle was the doctor and he had all the machines related to this disease .He currently purchase these machins from china by paying very largr ammount .And now my czn recover his health .

This is the largest example of the development ,that some products are used all over the world many of things also use even in europe countries are used.The mostuseable machne is dishwasher used all aover the world .

To conclude that this development makes world dfferent.The economy power of country also increase by promoting thier country things.We should also make homemade things are sale on the onlne app to promote our county.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear at the start: you consider worldwide access to food and other products a positive development. You give relevant examples, including noodles being available internationally and the medical equipment your cousin needed. However, the response only partly develops the task: the discussion shifts from food to technology and medical machinery, so the connection to consumers buying food from around the world is not consistently maintained. Some claims, such as this development increasing a country’s economic power, are introduced without explanation. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits and any possible drawbacks of international food availability, then develop each example directly in relation to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: you state your view, use “firstly” to introduce a reason, provide examples, and finish with a conclusion. The examples give the reader a general sense of your argument. However, progression is difficult to follow because ideas move abruptly from food to knowledge, medical equipment, dishwashers, and promoting local products. Connections between sentences are often unclear, and repeated phrases such as “many of things” do not show how one point leads to the next. Paragraphing also does not consistently separate distinct reasons. Group related ideas into focused paragraphs and use clear links to explain how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “development,” “products,” “economy,” and “promoting,” and the reader can generally identify your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated or imprecise, such as “many of things” and “take access.” Frequent spelling errors—including “everythngs,” “machinary,” and “avilabla”—also make parts of the response harder to read. Some word combinations are unnatural, for example “increase our knowledge about many things” and “the economy power of country.” Build a more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations carefully so your ideas are communicated more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall meaning is sometimes recoverable. However, the range of structures is limited, and attempts to combine ideas often contain frequent errors that can make the reader pause. For example, “I appreciate this technology because can access” lacks a clear subject, while “many of food that we use … are not made” has problems with articles, number, and agreement. Verb forms and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “it increase our knowledge” and the long sentence beginning “A few months ago, my czn was seriously ill.” Practise complete clauses, subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation, then proofread each sentence.

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