Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the contemporary world, the population density has became increased as well as the food production and the location of markets became decreased. Many people believe that purchasing produces from a supermarket highly convenient rather than purchasing goods from separate stores. In my opinion,while it faces several issues in developing countries, however, I strongly agree with this statement that it has quite advantages than the conventional markets.

Suparmarket plays a key role in day to day activities. One can easily get their commodity from it whatever the person wants. Significant amount of people go to a supermarket to purchase their desire food produced, getting from all over the world. For instance, many departmental shops in the US collected several vegetables and fruits around the globe as well.

On the other hand, the price of the product is higher than the regula

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position—“I strongly agree”—and begin to explain the convenience of buying food from one supermarket, with an example involving US shops sourcing produce internationally. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: it does not clearly explain the wider benefits or drawbacks of access to food from around the world, and the point about higher prices is left unfinished. The opening also introduces population density and market locations without showing how these relate to the question. The response is 141 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough development or support for your view. To strengthen the answer, explain two relevant reasons, develop each with an example, and finish with a clear conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph gives your view, followed by a paragraph about supermarkets and an “On the other hand” transition. This provides some structure, but the progression is difficult to follow because the opening shifts from population density to food production and market locations without explaining the connection. The example about US shops is also not clearly linked to your argument, and the final point about price stops mid-sentence, leaving the discussion incomplete. The contrast marker “On the other hand” signals a new point, but no explanation follows. Use a clear paragraph for each reason, connect examples explicitly to your position, and complete the argument with a concluding paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “supermarket,” “food produced,” “convenient,” and “conventional markets,” so the reader can identify the general subject. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “plays a key role” and “significant amount.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural, including “purchasing produces,” “their desire food produced,” and “the location of markets became decreased.” “Suparmarket” is also misspelled, and “regular” appears incomplete at the end. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to understand. Build a more precise range around international food supply, consumer choice, cost, and availability, and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, for example, “One can easily get their commodity from it whatever the person wants” and the opening sentence with “as well as.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, sentence construction, agreement, and punctuation can make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “has became increased,” “the location of markets became decreased,” and the unfinished construction “In my opinion,while it faces several issues … however.” The sentence about getting a commodity also has an unclear clause structure. Use shorter, complete sentences when expressing your main points, then practise accurate past and present forms and clause linking. Check punctuation around introductory phrases and avoid combining “while” and “however” in this way.

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