Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am requesting you to reschedule my working hours for the next 6 months as I am going to enroll in College.

I would like to inform you that Humber college offered me the opportunity to enroll in course Internation Business Management which will benefit our company in managing business with our international clients as most of our clients are foreigner. My classes will commence in January 2027 and timing will be 9AM to 11AM (Monday to Wednesday).

I would appreciate you if you could allow me to start my shift in the afternoon after 12 Noon as this is the best time I can start without affecting the clients as well as my study. Moreover, I am assuring you that my part-time course will not affect our company's task in any way and after finishing my studies I will be able to handle the toughest task more easily with better understanding and ideas.

I am waiting for your approval regarding schedule change before enrolling in School

Yours Sincerely,

Aakash

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requested points and maintains a clear, polite request. You explain that you want to study International Business Management, specify the class schedule and ask to begin work after noon, then connect the course to the company’s international clients and your future ability to handle demanding tasks. These relevant details support the purpose well. The benefit to the employer is clear, although it would be stronger with a more specific example of how the course knowledge could be applied to your current duties. The request could also state the proposed working hours more precisely, such as an afternoon start and finish time, rather than only saying “after 12 Noon.” Overall, the main ideas are extended and supported, with some room for more precise development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a clear progression: you introduce the request, explain the course and its schedule, propose a work arrangement, and close by asking for approval. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “Moreover” make the relationship between ideas easy to follow. The letter is generally coherent, though the second paragraph combines the course details with its business benefit, while the next paragraph contains several different points about scheduling and future performance. Separating these ideas more deliberately would make the progression even smoother. The closing request could also be linked more directly to the proposed schedule, so the reader is left with a precise action to consider.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a workplace request, including “reschedule,” “international clients,” “part-time course,” and “approval.” These choices communicate the purpose and relevant details clearly. There are, however, some inaccurate or unnatural word choices and collocations, such as “offered me the opportunity to enroll in course,” “clients are foreigner,” and “company’s task.” The phrase “toughest task” is understandable but not especially natural in this context. Aim for more precise workplace language and check singular/plural forms and common word partnerships. For example, “international customers,” “company’s work,” and “challenging assignments” would express your meaning more naturally and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter includes both simple sentences and longer structures, such as the sentence explaining that the course will benefit the company because many clients are international. Most meaning remains clear, and you use future forms to describe the course and its expected benefits. Some grammatical errors remain, including missing articles in “enroll in course” and “in College,” the incorrect form in “clients are foreigner,” and the construction “I would appreciate you if.” The sentence beginning “I am assuring you” also uses an awkward tense pattern for a promise. Review articles, plural agreement, and conditional request structures. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen the control shown in this response.

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