Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writting this letter to request for a working hour reduction as intend to study a part time Marketing course. Kindly, allow me to explain my situation.

This development will require a duration of 3 months, and a compulsory attendance each class day, that is why I would like to place adjustments in my work hours, in order to meet up with my daily work schedules and also attend classes as I am eager to continue working and also partake in this course.

The classes takes place three times a week which is on monday, wednesday, and friday from 2pm to 6pm prompt. Instead of the usual 8am to 5pm I would really appreciate if my work hours be adjusted to 8am till 1pm.

This marketing course will not only improve my personal development but also improves the growth of the company in terms of meeting companys target audience with my newly acquired marketing skills.

I awaits your immediate response amd a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain that you want to study a part-time Marketing course, propose working from 8 a.m. to 1 p.m. on class days, and connect your new skills to the company’s target audience. The request is clear and appropriately polite. The schedule is particularly specific, although it would help to clarify whether the reduced hours apply only on Monday, Wednesday and Friday or throughout the week. The employer benefit is relevant but remains general; explain how the course could improve a particular marketing activity or business outcome. The letter’s ending is incomplete, so it does not yet provide a finished, professional close. These details keep the response from developing every part equally fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a sensible overall sequence: request and reason, proposed schedule, then the benefit to the employer. Paragraphing helps the reader distinguish these points, and phrases such as “that is why” and “not only…but also” make some relationships clear. However, several links feel mechanical or unclear. For example, “This development will require a duration of 3 months” does not clearly connect the course duration to the requested schedule, and the long second paragraph combines several ideas without a clean progression. The final sentence stops at “amd a,” leaving the letter without a complete closing. Clarify the relationship between the course timetable and work hours, and use a complete sign-off to make the organisation more polished.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “compulsory attendance,” “adjustments,” “acquired marketing skills,” and “target audience.” These choices show an attempt to use more formal and topic-specific language. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “request for a working hour reduction,” “meet up with my daily work schedules,” and “from 2pm to 6pm prompt.” There are also spelling and form errors, including “writting,” “companys,” and “amd,” which reduce the overall control of vocabulary. Aim for natural workplace phrasing and check spelling carefully; precise expressions such as “reduce my working hours” and “meet my work commitments” would make the request clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause with “as” and the contrastive structure “not only…but also.” The main message is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “The classes takes place” has subject–verb disagreement, while “I awaits your immediate response” uses the wrong verb form. The opening sentence also lacks a clear subject after “as” (“as intend to study”), and “I would really appreciate if my work hours be adjusted” needs a more accurate clause structure. The unfinished final sentence further affects accuracy and completeness. Review agreement, verb forms, and clause construction, then proofread each sentence to ensure the intended meaning is expressed cleanly.

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