Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam

I am wirting a lettert to request to shorten the working hours for the of part time study regarding Customer Relation Course.

This short course of held once a year and I wanted to participate. In able to make these possible, I sencerly request to reduce the job duration atleast one hour. So basically from 8 working hours it become 7 hours. This one hour short is a great help to arrive on time in the venue.

I prefer the last hour of the working day. The course take one week, So, from October 5 Monday to October 10 friday, I entend to leave work an hour early.

This study offer how to handle angry customer, assisting them with proper courtisy and stay calm and cumpose even on the busy and stressful day. Thus for these I can contribute more to the company and help me to become productive and active.

Sencerly Yours,

Anthony Suaybaguio

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain that you want to attend a Customer Relations course, request a one-hour reduction, specify leaving an hour early, and describe how the training could help you handle customers. The request is understandable and relevant. However, some details are less fully developed: the proposed schedule is not stated as exact daily working hours, and the benefit to the employer is described generally rather than linked to a specific improvement in service or workplace outcomes. The dates and course duration are also presented somewhat unclearly. To strengthen the letter, state the precise hours you propose to work and explain more directly how the course skills would benefit the company.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible overall order: the reason for writing comes first, followed by the requested schedule and then the potential benefit to the employer. This makes the main purpose easy to identify. Paragraphing also separates the key points. Some connections are less smooth, however: phrases such as “So basically” and “Thus for these” make the progression sound mechanical, while the sentence giving the course dates is difficult to follow. The opening sentence also combines the request and course information in a crowded way. Use clearer transitions and make each paragraph focus on one point; for example, present the course dates and proposed daily hours in a direct, separate sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “reduce,” “participate,” “angry customer,” and “stressful day,” so the reader can understand the main ideas. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “Customer Relation Course” and “productive and active.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word combinations are noticeable, including “wirting,” “sencerly,” “job duration,” “one hour short,” and “courtisy.” Some expressions, such as “productive and active,” do not clearly explain the employer benefit. Choose standard workplace collocations and check spelling carefully. For instance, “reduce my working hours” and “leave one hour early” express the request more naturally and precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes both simple statements and attempts to connect ideas, for example, “This study offer how to handle angry customer” and “Thus for these I can contribute more to the company.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation make several sentences difficult to read. Examples include “This short course of held once a year,” “the course take one week,” and “from 8 working hours it become 7 hours.” The range of structures is limited, and attempts to form longer sentences are often faulty. Practise accurate basic clauses first, then combine them with clear subordinate clauses; check subject–verb agreement and tense consistency when revising.

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