Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to request you to reduce my working hours, as i am starting my part time study from next month.

I would like to inform you as that from next month, I only be able to work 24 hours a week. Six months ago I applied in Delta University for my Finance Development course, and they approve it now.

I do not want to quit my job. I will have my classes From Monday to Thursdays. I will be available for work every Friday, Saturday and Sundays. I would appreciate if I can work mornings,so in evening I can do my study.

This is a Finance study that will be helping me in my job a alot. After done this 6 months course, I will be doing practice with expert finance offericers. This will not only help me, but also helpfull for our company to use new terms and experience.

Please let me know if you have any other questions,hope you understand my situation.

Yours faithfully,

Mandeep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points and maintains a clear, appropriate purpose. You explain that you want to study a finance course and do not want to leave your job, specify a 24-hour week and identify the days and preferred morning shifts, then describe how the course could help both you and the company. These details make the request understandable and relevant. The benefit to the employer is present, especially in the reference to applying new knowledge, but it is somewhat general; explain more specifically how finance skills or practical experience could improve your work. A clearer, more developed account of that benefit would make the response more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a sensible sequence: the request and reason come first, followed by availability, the proposed schedule, and the potential benefit to the company. Paragraphing also helps distinguish the main points, and the closing is appropriate for a formal letter. Some links between ideas are less smooth, however. For example, “I would like to inform you as that” is an awkward transition, and the final sentence joins the request for questions with “hope you understand” without a clear connector or punctuation. The schedule could also be stated in one more clearly organised sentence. More controlled linking and sentence boundaries would make the progression feel more polished.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “reduce my working hours,” “part time study,” “Finance Development course,” and “available for work.” The reader can understand the main request and the intended benefit. However, several word choices and forms are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “practice with expert finance offericers,” “new terms and experience,” and “helpfull.” “Starting my part time study” is also less natural than a phrase such as “beginning my part-time studies.” These errors limit precision and make parts of the letter sound less professional. Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling and word forms, particularly in the explanation of how your training will benefit the company.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The letter includes both simple statements and attempts at more complex sentences, such as “This will not only help me, but also…” and the explanation of your study schedule. The overall meaning remains clear, but errors in verb forms, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to affect accuracy. For example, “I only be able to work” needs a correctly formed future verb, while “they approve it now” does not use the appropriate tense. “I would appreciate if I can work mornings” also needs a more accurate conditional structure. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “From Monday” and the run-on final sentence. Practise reliable sentence patterns before adding complexity.

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