Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Kumar,

I am writing this letter to request reduction in my working hours for my part time studies.I have been a keen of learning disticnt languages since my childhood.I know seven other languages from diffrent nation which I have visited in my past.Now I am planning to learn a new laguage which is french.In accordance,I need some time to focus on learning it.

The classes were being held at our society meeting hall as these courses are going to be done by proffesor Jeffery.He lives in our society since 12 years.Jeffery will teach us french starting afternoon at 2 pm till 6 pm in evening.So,during this period of time i will be unavailable.Please provide me reduction in my working hours.

I also noticed that our company use a middleman just to communicate with clients which has french as there only known language.Learning french will also help us to reduce this cost and will make us communicate efficently with them without any delay.I hope you can understant my concern to learn new language.

I will be waiting to hear back from you.

Your faithfully

Tushar kharb

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain that you want time to study French, specify that classes run from 2 p.m. to 6 p.m., and describe how French could help the company communicate directly with clients and reduce intermediary costs. The employer benefit is relevant and gives the request a persuasive purpose. However, the exact working hours you are asking to keep are not stated clearly; “Please provide me reduction in my working hours” does not say what schedule you propose. The reason for studying is explained, but the personal and professional benefits of the course could be developed more directly. State the hours you can work and briefly explain how your new language skills will be used in your role.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: the opening explains the request, the next paragraph gives the class schedule, and the final body paragraph describes a benefit to the company. This makes the main purpose easy to follow. Some connections are less smooth, however. “In accordance” does not clearly link your language-learning plans to the need for reduced hours, and “So, during this period of time” repeats information from the preceding sentence. The shift from describing the teacher and venue to asking for a schedule change could also be more direct. Use straightforward links such as “As the classes run from…” and make the requested work arrangement explicit. A conventional closing would also help the letter feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “reduction in my working hours,” “middleman,” “clients,” and “communicate,” and the reader can understand your main points. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “unavailable” and “reduce this cost.” However, several spelling errors—“disticnt,” “diffrent,” “laguage,” “proffesor,” and “understant”—make the writing less polished. Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “a keen of learning” and “clients which has French as there only known language.” Choose accurate collocations and proofread spelling; for example, say “keen to learn” and “clients who speak only French.” This would make your vocabulary more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple and more developed sentence forms, including the relative clause in “a middleman just to communicate with clients” and the reason clause beginning “as these courses…”. The message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. For example, “I am writing this letter to request reduction” needs an article, and “our company use” has a subject–verb agreement error. In “clients which has French as there only known language,” the relative pronoun and verb do not agree with the plural noun. There are also punctuation and capitalisation issues, such as missing spaces after full stops and lowercase “i.” Review articles, agreement, relative clauses, and sentence punctuation while retaining your range of sentence structures.

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