Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Boss

This is Himani. I hope you are doing well. I am working in your company as a human resource manager from last two years. I am writing this letter to you regarding to talk about my working hours. I want to reduce my working hours because I have to pay attention to my studies. I have keen interest in studies, so that's why I think to do study part time.

Although, I do not want to left my job. I just want to fix the hours of the job. I would like to work 10 am to 5 pm.

Moreover, I want to purse master's degree in business. It will enhance my knowledge and understanding about work, so it would beneficial for you as well.

I hope you will understand my situation and adjust my hours accordingly. I will be thankful to you for this great gesture.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the proposed hours, and the benefits to the employer. However, the response is slightly under the 150-word minimum, which impacts the development of ideas. The explanation of how the studies benefit the employer is quite brief and could have been expanded to show a more professional connection between the Master's degree and your current role as an HR manager. Because the length requirement was not met, the development of the response is limited, preventing a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, and the progression of ideas is generally clear. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'Although' to link sentences. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the flow between the introduction and the body paragraphs could be smoother. The use of paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter, but the overall structure is quite simple. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'pay attention to my studies' and 'fix the hours'. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'regarding to talk' (should be 'regarding') and 'I do not want to left' (should be 'leave'). To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more professional, topic-specific vocabulary related to business and employment, and ensure that your verb forms are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'I am working... from last two years' (should be 'for the last two years'), 'I have keen interest' (should be 'a keen interest'), and 'I want to purse' (should be 'pursue'). While these errors do not prevent the message from being understood, they indicate a lack of control over basic grammatical rules and sentence construction. Increasing your accuracy in verb tenses and articles will significantly improve your score.

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