Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear, Sir /Madam

I am writing this letter to request in reducing my works from 10 hours to 6 hours per day as i needed more time for my study .

There are some reasons which will boost my knowledge about mechincal works and it will improve my working capabilities .Firstly, it course is realted to PlC system , provides deep information how it works and it help me troubleshooting the electrical problem more rapdily . It will decreae the maintainence repair time .

As the classes are in the evening , i am requesting to start my shift from 8 am to 2 pm and these are more most busy hours in company and will cover these as well .

Moreover , these course also providing the basics of the electrical components , which are highly benefical and there will no need to hire more electrician and it will help maintaing the budget.

I will look forward for your prompt response .

Yours faithfully .

Mantej Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained the reason for your request (part-time study), specified your preferred working hours (8 am to 2 pm), and clearly articulated how your employer would benefit from your new skills, such as improved troubleshooting and cost-efficiency. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are fully developed; for instance, you could briefly mention how your current role relates to the PLC system to make the argument more persuasive. Overall, the task requirements are met effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the request to the justification and the benefits. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'As', which help the reader follow your argument. However, the paragraphing is somewhat fragmented, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. Some transitions feel a bit mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea. The use of referencing is generally clear, though some minor improvements in sentence connectivity would enhance the overall readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using technical terms like 'PLC system', 'troubleshooting', and 'electrical components' appropriately. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'mechincal', 'realted', 'rapdily', 'decreae', and 'maintaing'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To achieve a higher score, focus on proofreading your work to eliminate these simple spelling mistakes and try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations to express your ideas with greater precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the' is often missing or misused), verb forms ('these course also providing'), and punctuation (incorrect spacing before commas). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall accuracy. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentences are punctuated correctly. Focusing on these foundational areas will help you produce more error-free sentences.

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