Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to enquire about working hours adjustment in order to have enough time for my part time study.

My part time education is about to begin in this fall semester and requires a free available time window. However, my current working hours do not allow me to attend my school hours on time. If it is possible, could we change and reduce my working hours for the fall period? I could work from 4 to 7 pm for 3 days a week.

I sincerely ask you to consider my application request because studying in school allows me to boost my career and enhance my working skills for the job. In addition to that, part time studies will show me more about different perspective and angles of our job which makes my performance better.

Please let me know if you require any further information related to time adjustment or school details.

Thank you for your assistance. I look forward to your reply.

Your faithfully,

Mark

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, specifying the desired hours, and describing the benefits to the employer. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of the third point regarding how the studies benefit the employer is somewhat generic. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific examples of how the skills gained in your course would be applied to your current tasks at work. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the requirements are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'In addition to that', and 'If it is possible' to link your ideas. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter. To improve, you could vary your linking words further to avoid a slightly mechanical feel. For instance, instead of 'In addition to that', you might use 'Furthermore' or 'Moreover' to enhance the flow between sentences. The progression of ideas is easy to follow throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using phrases like 'enquire about', 'adjustment', and 'enhance my working skills'. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'my part time education is about to begin in this fall semester' (should be 'this fall' or 'the fall semester') and 'show me more about different perspective' (should be 'perspectives'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the more sophisticated or precise collocations that would elevate the response to a higher band. Focusing on natural word combinations will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the conditional 'If it is possible, could we...'. Most of your sentences are clear and error-free, though there are a few slips, such as 'Your faithfully' (should be 'Yours faithfully') and 'my part time education' (should be 'part-time' with a hyphen). These errors do not impede communication. To achieve a higher band, try to incorporate a wider variety of complex grammatical structures, such as passive voice or relative clauses, while maintaining the high level of accuracy you have already established.

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