Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time.

Write a letter to your boss. In your letter

• explain why you want to reduce your working hours
• say which hours you would like to work
• describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter in accordance to switch my full time working schedule to the part time hours. I want to reduce my working hours and concentrate more towards my studies as my study is getting neglected due to the working schedule.

Firstly, I would like to highlight about my course (BUSINESS MANAGEMENT) which I am opting upcoming semester. I am so thrilled to get back to the studies and focus on my goal which I thought when choose the stream. To focus more, I definitely need to work more on my studies, lectures, tests.

Currently, I am working Monday to Sunday with my full availability. My new schedule would be Monday to Friday 2:30 pm to 10:20 pm. Working less than usual will surely help me to pay attention towards any studies and achieve my target the end of the year.

Furthermore, I believe that this would help not only me but you as well Sir. According to me while framing the schedule, it will be easy for you to divide the remaining hours to the other employees instead of hiring the new part time worker.

Lastly, I would appreciate if you will consider my request. I will be highly thankful to you. Looking forward for the positive response.

Yours Faithfully,

Ridhima

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You explained the need to reduce hours for study, specified the desired schedule, and suggested a benefit to the employer. However, the third point regarding how your studies benefit the employer is somewhat underdeveloped. You focused more on the logistical benefit of scheduling rather than how the knowledge gained from your Business Management course would add value to the company. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are fully extended and clearly linked to the employer's interests. Overall, the tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter follows a logical structure with clear paragraphing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'Lastly' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between your current schedule and the proposed one is functional but could be more sophisticated. The use of referencing is generally clear, though some sentences are slightly disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that ideas flow more naturally from one to the next will help elevate your score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'opt', 'stream', and 'availability'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'in accordance to switch' (should be 'to request a change') and 'concentrate more towards' (should be 'concentrate more on'). Additionally, 'my study is getting neglected' is slightly unnatural; 'my studies are suffering' would be more idiomatic. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, you should aim to incorporate more precise collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing to move into the higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'my study is getting neglected' (subject-verb agreement), 'which I thought when choose the stream' (missing auxiliary/tense error), and 'achieve my target the end of the year' (missing preposition). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that relative clauses are constructed accurately. Reviewing your work for these small but frequent errors will significantly improve your accuracy.

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